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SketerMichaels
Mon Mar 20 20:25:22 2017

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My Review of Blank by RamSlade
Method to the madness
I would interpret the stanzas as being a sort of internal wrestling that goes on with the creative spirit. The couplets seem like a manifesting of all the frustration that no creativity has taken place. This is a completely false notion. The actual creativity is not in the two line epiphany but in the wrestling itself! I like this style you've been experimenting with. I really liked this form when you used it a while back in that piece about the New Orleans bar. You've shown here that your "Septcouplet" isn't just a one trick pony. A good piece here as well.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Mar 19 22:20:38 2017

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My Review of Whispers From the Cellar by JohnCreekmore
Great advice!
I have no idea how figuratively or literally you intended the " denizens of the dark" who like to hang out in the cellar to be taken. Some would say that to believe in such is to give them power. I would say the human perceptions of ""Alone;""Lost;""Too late;" and
"Futile" are the means by which such garner their strength over us regardless of what our belief system might state. The best way I've found to shut the critters up is to start agreeing with them. "Yes" I say, "You all are right in your assessment of me. I'm a piece of work, but...but you still have no right to this!" "This" being the blessed hope that we can not relinquish and is wholly justified. It's a great big God. It's a tiny devil. I sing a bar of "Jesus Loves Me" and start focusing on what happened about 33 AD. That may sound awfully childish, but it shuts'em up. Otherwise, by now they'd have me dead, in jail, a nuthouse, or living on the street. They have no antidote for hope. That's why they have to steal it.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Mar 18 11:48:46 2017

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My Review of
~*Sweet Song*~
by Littlesong
Passionate plea
When I read this all i can say is I am swept into your overtures. It would take a cold heart indeed to say,"No" to such a request. The first stanza reads like someone who is grabbing you by the sleeve to pull you in. I love the lines, "Drown a promise/Deep into my heart/
That in thine I will live." to me that is the difference when souls make love. Another beautiful picture of loves rapture you painted for us Littlesong!

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 10 10:55:22 2017

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My Review of Untitled Piece by augustrush
Powerful
Because words have power. The move toward reclamation is framed as an expressions of pain in a very honest way. I particularly like the final stanza. The process isn't complete until those words are erased, yet the process of erasing memories founded on a false perception are perhaps the most painful thing of all. If this cathartic effort is any indication, I'd say you were well on your way to filling in the blank spaces.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 10 09:11:28 2017

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My Review of Crusaders by JohnCreekmore
You are what you hate. There is black and white but it is in the human heart that shades of gray are found. Judging the motives of others is often where we get pulled into becoming the evil we try to combat. After all, each motive is at the center of the individual and is directed by the self. A pure motive would be selfless, and that's awfully hard to come by. In reality self invariably turns us all into packs of wild apes that march off together in our own familiar troops. Could it be that we hate what is driving evil because we hate what is actually driving our own selves? Another nicely worded piece of thought to get the ball rolling.

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SketerMichaels
Wed Mar 8 07:47:36 2017

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My Review of Married to Two by richom
fiction
Of course, and that's the story we're all to stick with! In the highly, highly unlikely event that this is not just complete hog wash, this beloved you described must be near of kin to a female person I used to know years ago. She of course has no resemblance to the lovely woman I'm married to (in case she's listening). An excellent, breezy fun write and rhyme!

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SketerMichaels
Sun Mar 5 10:46:59 2017

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My Review of One Simple Touch by Valentine
Very nice
I was reading this and it sounds like it could very easily be the lyrics to a popular contemporary church song. At least from my perspective, that is how it resonates best. I don't know what your musical abilities are, but have you considered putting this to a melody? I can imagine hearing these words being delivered on a K-Love station.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Mar 5 10:30:46 2017

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My Review of Brighthelm Community Centre by terrygodwin
Good for you Terry! You made the place sound just like what it's name implies; a center of community. I'm sure the officials who honored and asked you to write such a piece were pleased with the result. This is a well done yet simple utilitarian use of the craft that will probably be around for a long time.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 3 00:43:16 2017

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My Review of
Abounding Love
by Littlesong
Spell bound
My interpretation is this is like a poetic conjuring. Your creating the lover as much as your drawing the lover to you by your words. Commands of creation to bring about the described "scent" akin to "sandalwood." which fulfills a poetic bound. In summation, it is an invitation to the reader, "to shed the world with/My Poetic Love." I think you have done a very nice job of making your call to do so in this piece.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 26 23:12:57 2017

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My Review of Some very honest thoughts on posting and reviewing by Halicen
Agree for the most part
I've found this site to be quite beneficial and have grown from it. Reviewing other people's work has helped me grow more as a writer more than writing the pieces which I decide to post here. One thing I try to do is if there is a spelling correction or some sort of glaring typo, I'll usually not post it in the first comment, but as a tag on the second or message the writer. some people don't care but others might. Regardless, those who just give a slap on the back "Great job, loved it, keep writing" one line review get ignored. That kind of thing benefits no one.
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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 26 20:22:48 2017

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My Review of Where Did All The Writers Go? by Silverblue
Consumer confidence
For me that has been the real issue here.Whoever it is that is responsible for this sight would do a little more to maintain it. No one has updated anything since at least 2015 and every time the site crashes it bleeds a few more off. When I see people make post about how long it takes to get a pro upgrade I wonder if anyone is actually monitoring this site at all. As far as the participants themselves, there are some pretty descent writers here and it's always fun to share your passion with people all around the world. A number of my favorites that I really liked to follow have, as you said, come and gone. It is still a worthwhile venue to connect, but I think the managers really need to do a little something to breath new life into this site and act like it is something they care about. I appreciate you writing this piece to give a way to voice these concerns openly.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 26 15:46:24 2017

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My Review of Happy F****** Birthday! by calsdarkembrace
As a song writer
I've written at least 200 songs in my life from heavy metal to folk and gospel. Sometimes lyrics don't translate to good poetry but I'm not sure at all that is the case with this one. You expressed your point and showed what is true genuine feeling. I don't know you and have never read any of your work that I remember but NEVER be afraid to step out of your comfort zone and try new things. The same person who blasted you on this blasted me and called me narrow minded and judgmental last week for saying I didn't care for slam poetry in the author notes of a poem I'd written. JUDGE NOT LEAST YE BE JUDGED! The previous critique was ridiculous! Bless you young lady and SPOTLIGHT!

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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 25 10:10:04 2017

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My Review of Bumper Sticker Stupid by BobQuinn
Sometimes
You have to think about what some of those bumper stickers mean, and sometimes I just miss it all together. They have have a longer impact than say a meme on Facebook which essentially do the same thing except you can't click a like button or make a comment on the persons page. You just have to sit and stare at it until the light changes and make judgments about the person's politics, hobbies, religion, sense of humor etc.
Some of the phrases you put down in this poem I can see working and making sense in a bumper sticker's context. I can see a dog lover putting something about herding cats with a pack on their vehicle, or an avid fishermen putting something about bait on the back of his trailer. You have to look at the presentation to understand what they are talking about. Likewise this piece interestingly enough makes a similar demand of the reader, but I think I get what you were trying to say.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Feb 24 20:55:22 2017

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My Review of Keeping the Doors Closed by RamSlade
Painful to consider
I know for myself the pain I've received from past wounds doesn't normally hurt at present because I eventually find ways to forgive others and those doors just don't keep the same bite they once did. The doors I really have to sneak past are the ones where the hurts dwell that I myself have inflicted on others in the past. That is the hardest door to close and the one I tend to visit when no one else is looking. It takes considerable grace from above to move past them. This piece is extremely honest and shows considerable vulnerability.

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SketerMichaels
Thu Feb 23 22:27:00 2017

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My Review of A Trickling Light by RamSlade
20 Trillion in debt
Pure and simple, that is criminal and what we have is unsustainable. As the late great Ronald Reason said, "Government isn't the solution. It's the problem!" Our national fabric and freedom have eroded to a point that the "cracks" are evident to anyone who still cares and has sense enough to see what is coming (a ruthless way of life). I once thought it was crazy talk but If something doesn't change very soon, I see a day when I'll need a significant cache of gold and ammo. I hope the election of Trump finally woke them up enough to realize the American people want this non sense STOPPED and FIXED NOW!

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SketerMichaels
Thu Feb 23 07:26:53 2017

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My Review of Hearts by JohnCreekmore
Check your own
I used to wonder how a mob 2,000 years ago set one thief free and crucified a savior. Now I only pray and ask the Lord to not be part of the same mob. It's easy to do and think you are justified in doing so because ones own justification is the first inclination by nature. In our time social media loves to stoke that inclination so all the different strains of self-righteousness can pool around their own. Regarding our present political situation, Trump isn't a savior or a thief. He is a man of many flaws and virtues and both the flaws and virtues which he posses have resulted in his election to the most difficult job in the world. Another wise thoughtful piece.

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SketerMichaels
Mon Feb 20 17:10:49 2017

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My Review of I PROFESS! by kitty
Well done
This had a very nice flow. The thee and thou wasn't cumbersome or unwarranted at all and gave it a nice elegant feel. Unrequited passion was well expressed. I especially liked the lines "Command my woman love to thy reach or / let the voiceless fortitude convey to you it's grief." A good job and a good read!

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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 19 22:58:07 2017

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My Review of Simply Senryu 5: Now I lay me by JimSlaughter
Didn't know
Three verses in haiku were called a senryu. I saw it here and googled it to see what it was. I'm not sure if you are transitioning into death in the second verse or if you are just referring to an unsettling dream just before you wake up. Maybe the creepy thing is the narrator isn't sure either. You revealed a good bit of dark fear in just a few short verses. I really like the way you effectively used the tool of alliteration in a short unrhymed piece.

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SketerMichaels
Tue Feb 14 07:23:06 2017

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My Review of My Expiration Date by richom
Don't know when
but it's like my granddad used to say before his time came,"We've all got that appointment to keep." You make dying sound like an awful lot of fun , but actually it is life that is giving off all the joy. Funny when we are confronted with death how much living we decide to start doing. This is a very well written and rhymed and it reads flawlessly.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 11 14:38:56 2017

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My Review of Stateless Child by thechoice78
My opinion
That seems to be what this piece is trying to elicit. I am married to a Mexican national and I've spent a fair amount of time south of the border. It is a beautiful country with a lot of wonderful people that I consider my family. We have two children together and they are both unquestionably American citizens because we followed the law and did things the right way. Your real or hypothetical "Maria" did not. The level of corruption and lawlessness embedded in their system and culture is the biggest hindrance that Mexico has. The resources are there but so much potential ends up on this side of the Rio Grande. Furthermore, illegal immigration has been encouraged by both sides of our political spectrum because one side wants cheap labor, and the other wants a permanent dependent class. Good luck to Maria and her 5.8 kids and Good luck to Morales. Mexican jails are Hell.
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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 11 13:53:58 2017

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My Review of My 9/11 - Talking Heads by jonni-inferno
They could only wish
They've only gotten dumber since that day. You'd think that such a calloused cowardly action would have served to bring us closer together as a country, but they've managed to divide us. 9/11 should have been a sure kick between the goal posts of reality for all of them, but it somehow sailed wide left. Fortunately the majority of the country is no longer paying all that much attention to what they are saying anymore. Then again. with popular journalism so badly discredited that could end up being a dangerous spot for the culture to be in over the long run. This was a fun flowing poem piece of cynicism concerning the darkest of subjects. All in all quite appropriate.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 4 15:42:57 2017

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My Review of TRUE SADNESS by Galacticbeam
Interesting nuance
I don't know if it was a typo but if it wasn't I'm intrigued. "The Hem of his garment" is a New Testament allusion to Christ ministry but "Hem" is capitalized while "his" is left in lower case although it is in reference to God. Perhaps the veiled conclusion of the final stanza to finding that happiness is to let loose of the material and grasp the spiritual. It looks to me like a very clever esoteric maneuver. The third stanza fits very well into this interpretation and carries greater power than one might casually conclude. Excellent work.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 4 15:16:55 2017

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My Review of TRAVELERS TO UNCERTAINTY by Galacticbeam
the poem is multi-verse
Pardon the pun. In truth we are all travelers of uncertainty but our own consciousness is perhaps the greatest unknown variable in the overall equation of what will be. Other than that consciousness, why would we ever choose to embark on such a quest. For that reason it is not difficult for me to give full throated acknowledgement to a greater hand which moves the course we follow. This pondering like quantum physics cracks the door open just a bit to the spiritual. The possibilities that were not and were even probable are the only components needed to blow the reality we perceive into pieces and lead us to the divine conclusion. On this ride our drawn conclusions are our greatest choice.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 4 00:02:54 2017

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My Review of Winter's Snow by Valentine
Big difference
Here in Arkansas we haven't had but maybe 5 days of what one might call winter this year, and that is a stretch. But around here that can change very quickly! I'm glad to see you are at least able to appreciate the beauty of the season, but I've visited the north in the winter, and I can't say that I'd trade it for a place like this state that shuts completely down and sends everyone's grandmother scurrying to the store for milk, bread, and eggs when we get only a dusting of the white stuff. Try to stay warm!

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SketerMichaels
Fri Feb 3 23:37:35 2017

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My Review of MY NEW HEART by seriouspoet
So it starts
I know the Lord has given me a new one, and continually restores the one I have. You are right. There will be many storms up ahead but I couldn't have weathered them with the heart I had. I have no idea if you are writing of a new found freedom and joy, or if you are simply describing something that has been with you fir a while. Either way I wish to congratulate you and encourage the walk you have chosen to make!
Best wishes to you,
Skeet

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