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SketerMichaels
Thu May 25 22:59:20 2017

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My Review of Of times gone by by JimSlaughter
Just wonderful
Not the more familiar Shakespearean sonnet but one of the Italian variety i believe. You really wrote something that seemed to come from the heart using a pretty difficult format. I thought the firefly simile was outstanding and very well placed and phrased. This reminds me in spirit a lot of one of my favorite Elvis songs 'Memories.' The lyrics are very powerful and poetic and not something you generally associate with the "King." if you want to google it on YouTube I think you might enjoy it if you've never heard it. Anyway, outstanding sonnet Jim!

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SketerMichaels
Thu May 25 22:33:53 2017

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My Review of 582. by Profanisaurus
Ouch
You sound a wee bit bitter in this one. I thought delivering your bad experience in a relationship with a recipe format worked really well. It read as a breezy metaphor for a subject that is often written in a very woeful and cliche terms that are usually only interesting to the author. Wasn't the case for me here. Reminds me of a couple of the real sweethearts that I dated back in the day. I enjoyed this piece.

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SketerMichaels
Thu May 25 15:25:41 2017

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My Review of I of the storm. by SAnthonyH
Very sweet
There is nothing wrong with this poem. Most of the time you wouldn't want to read anything it took me only two hours to write. Sometimes it just falls onto the paper, but I've had pieces that sat around and waited 25 years for a rewrite. Some people think it has to be spontaneous but in my opinion the best poetry needs some time to craft. Most anyone who has been young and in love can relate to this poem. Your phrasing was wonderful and your nature imagery was dead on. This one is put together pretty well.

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SketerMichaels
Mon May 22 23:33:16 2017

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My Review of
Out of Love (Emptiness)
by Littlesong
Painful
Often these sorts of end up being the most self indulgent pieces in cathartic practice you can find. Some are so bad and cliche they end up having the opposite effect and bring about a little laughter. This is wrong of course I know, but such is the chief merit of bad poetry. This however is far from that. The despair is expressed so sensually through beautiful metaphor that show us anything but an empty soul. The only thing bad about this one is you have to experience the pain to write about it. Wonderfully expressed!

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SketerMichaels
Sun May 21 11:07:40 2017

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My Review of Another year older (Birthday 2017) by JimSlaughter
Glad to hear it!
You're as keen as ever my friend! Happy Birthday and many more to come while you figure it out for us and bring a smile to my face!

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 20 12:32:28 2017

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My Review of The Guardian by fraido
Very nice
I like the flow and style of this one. To me, this is a good example of how a loose structure can accentuate the subject. The varied rhyme and meter very much serve to mimic the "Guardian." I can see how someone might infer more meaning from this piece, but then again it is just as well to read along and take a climb up those jagged rocks following as the authors steps along off set lines. A good write and an enjoyable read.

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 20 09:38:57 2017

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My Review of The Incomprehensible by JohnCreekmore
For the most part
I would say you were dead on. We really don't see the complete picture and know the reasons or what the final result will be. It kind of reminds me of the line from the old church hymn "farther along we'll no all about it" yet I can't believe we should just accept whatever misery gets passed off to us (I don't think that's what you're saying) and suffering isn't our purpose, just part of the process. I have a little question about the last verse. Nothing is more incomprehensible than some of the actions humans take. However, I would condemn those very actions for the evil they are. In its context it
seems perhaps the point of the last verse is to say there is a higher unseen purpose that is not to be condemned.

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 20 08:20:56 2017

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My Review of Rodents by michaelgallatin
As Billy Corgan
of the Smashing Pumpkins sang, "Despite all my rage I am still just a rat in the a cage" This one rolls off pretty well and replicates the same thought in each stanza. In the context of the poem the replication of the rhyme on each line in the stanza makes perfect sense as well. In my opinion you went in the right direction with this idea, and didn't try to make what could have been a much darker piece with the idea. I would be just as concerned with the "giant hand" picking you up and feeding you to the snake in the cage across the room.

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SketerMichaels
Thu May 18 23:58:57 2017

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My Review of Creativity's First Draft by odinroark
Epiphany
Sometimes the excitement over the initial moment is so great that it doesn't get carried to full term. Still when it comes to me, I can think and do nothing else. I've had a number of first drafts written on napkins and paper plates or whatever I could find. I once wrote most of a sonnet on a popcorn bag. I've got 3 or 4 scratch pieces of paper laying on my dresser right now of first drafts that came but I'm not ready to sit down at the computer and craft into something. Some miscarry, and some for better or worse complete the gestation period. I appreciate this as I do most of your pieces Odin. Thank you for sharing with us.

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SketerMichaels
Thu May 18 23:21:15 2017

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My Review of Hymn To The Rising Sun by ALEXJLOCKWOOD
Very interesting
I've written a little in Spanish and impressed myself but to do something in ancient Egyptian??? That's quite a scholarly feat! Akhenaten would be proud. The ancient Egyptian seems to have a rhyme to it. I'm just curious if the verse written during the period had any sort of rhyme or scheme? How much of the actual pronunciation were they able to deduce off the Rosetta Stone, or is it all just a guess? This is pretty cool! Anyway, it's good to see you back and posting Alex!

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 13 15:59:11 2017

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My Review of THE PASSAGE by kitty
Good advice.
I'm sure your son would do well to follow after his mother's sound council. The world itself may be sane and logical, but people are seldom such. We all deviate entirely too much to be considered such. I don't know if tomorrow is Mother's day in the UK as well as the US, but I hope you both are able to have some wonderful time together!

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 13 14:56:55 2017

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My Review of Out of Emptiness by RobertRonnow
Whew!
This is quite a well expressed bit of consideration concerning life and its meaning. A lot to reflect on and weigh. It's also a pretty thorough list of references in the author's notes. You overlooked the biggest one in all literature though when it comes to finding meaning in the emptiness; Genesis 1:2-3, "And the earth was without form, and void; and darkness was upon the face of the deep. And the Spirit of God moved upon the face of the waters. And God said , Let there be light: and there was light." Perhaps He is the original Poet, and we're just constantly unraveling the complex yet simple meaning behind all the lines that have been composed.

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 13 01:40:26 2017

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My Review of What to do, What to do by RamSlade
Reminds me of
What it was Yogi Berra said," When you come to a fork in the road, take it." I think most of the time our instincts are correct, but then sometimes you have to restrain yourself and wait for the timing. It's kind of like a young lion that is hungry and has the drive to kill but doesn't quite know when to take off after the antelope. I like the craftsmanship of this one. The way it's cadence and form is shaped and delivered really adds to the feel you were trying to get across. It was quite masterfully done!

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 13 01:07:52 2017

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My Review of Victor by vuriz
Well done!
I love the way your emotions are expressed. This is a fine piece of lonely introspection that very much flows from the heart. The abrupt transition from the free verse lines of despairing lost love into the prose paragraph beginning, " There is no poetry in Los Angeles," just vaulted me into the piece. I particularly liked the simile of her love being like the garden gate. Also the line about poets being " truth scavengers trapped in a world of forgers'' really sticks. The rest of it about your relationship with your father and your name was compelling as well, but perhaps it might fit better in another prose writing in my opinion. The final line of the preceding paragraph ," Please donít be afraid, its not contagious." was such a strong line and to me seems a good place to conclude. Just a humble suggestion, but what do i know? You write really well Victor!

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 6 09:20:34 2017

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My Review of Remembering by michaelgallatin
well done
I think you should try writing more free verse. This is one of your better pieces you've posted in my humble opinion. This kind of prosetry has far more power and resonance than forcing out rhymed quatrains and couplets (not that there is anything wrong with that kind of form on certain poems). This however reads really well and there is no broken up meter to be concerned with and stumble through that will disturb the flow when someone else reads it aloud. This one is a Spotlight for sure! Great job!

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SketerMichaels
Sat May 6 07:25:08 2017

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My Review of Awakening by JohnCreekmore
What we now see
I once heard a dying man say,"We waste all our life on all the wrong things." Maybe it's not a waste. It just takes a life time to stop chasing what's on the outside and start looking at what's on the inside. As Paul said ," Now I know in part; but then shall I know even as also I am known." In my opinion the arrangement of the verses are perfectly logical and effective just the way they are. I wouldn't change anything.

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SketerMichaels
Thu May 4 01:04:28 2017

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My Review of First Date by BeckyWall
Good Luck!
You've written about something that is common place in our world at this time. We are wired in all kinds of strange ways that no one considered much 10 or 15 years ago but we are still very human and the places we make that connection is at a far more profound level than we are able to achieve with a smart phone. It seems strange that for many face to face is "an alien confrontational concept" but for many that has become truth. You expressed that odd modern circumstance well in this piece. I hope this meeting lived up to all the expectations you've built up.

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SketerMichaels
Thu May 4 00:39:07 2017

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My Review of Simply Senryu 6: Dancing by myself by JimSlaughter
Nice set
I like all of these haiku verses. I really like the proverbial quality that often comes through with this genre. For some reason these reminded me a little bit of one of my favorites poets, William Blake. I know English romantics are a far cry from Japanese art but that's kind of where it took my mind. Fine work Jim!

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SketerMichaels
Wed May 3 23:46:29 2017

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My Review of HE PLAYED by kitty
I'm not sure why you would consider this to be prose Ms Kitty. A rhyme scheme is mixed but present, and even the stanzas seem to have a set structure. To me this sounds like someone who is some sort of political demagogue. There are many (as there always have been i suppose) who fit your description, It comes across as something of a riddle. I guess as the Good Book says ," Let him that hath understanding." Good job here!

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SketerMichaels
Tue May 2 23:39:54 2017

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My Review of Melody of the Countryside by RachelMurray
Well done
The varied meter on each line of the quatrains makes me suspect that you may have already put this one to music, or wrote it as you were playing your instrument. That would explain how you kept such a good flow through the variances. Most people who just write poems don't land on their feet nearly so well. Whatever the case you show a very good ear. The poem itself is lovely too and takes you on a nice little rustic journey as it creates the mood with some measure of depth to consider. Definitely a spotlight on this one.

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SketerMichaels
Tue May 2 20:07:27 2017

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My Review of Young Love by RamSlade
Short and sweet
Kind of like this affair seems to have been. I like the second stanza and I think a short measured consistent cadence is really effective in this type of short rhymed piece. You leave a lot to the readers imagination but still connect with minimal words. What goes unsaid ends up being part of the connective glue.

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SketerMichaels
Thu Apr 13 22:03:09 2017

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My Review of Once There Did Exist... by odinroark
Neat parallel
I think that was interesting the way you showed how the metaphors that antiquities mythology left in our culture run parallel to the mythology or wild imaginings of our childhood. The two happenings connect to our humanity in much the same way, and their gradual demise renders the same kind of strange melancholy while it stirs a remembrance of innocence. Still these origins that first captivate our imagination are what often spark greater things. I really like the thought and tone of this piece. It's put together in such a way that the two are shown corresponding. The statue drawing a grin of acceptance is a cool way of rounding it off.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Apr 8 12:26:02 2017

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My Review of
~*April Breath*~
by Littlesong
Beautiful
I like the way you ended this one just fine! This is far more overtly spiritual than most of your other pieces. To me "April Breath" seems like it is more of a metaphor for God's presence than the simple change of the season. May His April breath be with you through all of your life's trials! May That love keep you.

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SketerMichaels
Wed Apr 5 09:19:30 2017

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My Review of The Traveler . . . Reworked by RamSlade
Pilgrims regress
Excellent write and phrasing of a pretty nightmarish perspective. To me the American dream is the freedom to pursue whatever dream you want. This is the right bestowed upon us by our Creator. I see and such a light of hope slowly being extinguished and replaced with the things man and his institutions bestow upon us. As we have pursued such a decadent self motivated excessive course, placing our hope in the external, all we achieve is a dark, cyclical gasp of what is allusive and vanishing. I don't know if this is where the collective American dream leads, but judging by the divisions in our nation, we are at a definite crossroads.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Apr 2 21:21:36 2017

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My Review of Balancing Everything Out by RamSlade
Very sage
I'd agree wholeheartedly. If you go down one wrong road, guilt is certain to lead down another one that is just as bad or even worse. We all wish sometimes it didn't take who we were then to get us to who we are now but it's just part of it and you can't dwell on your past. I often think my "unbroken sigh of harmony" might just be my own hard head, but at least I'm able to provide some constant in the universal equation. A nicely considered piece of introspection.

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