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SketerMichaels
Thu Apr 13 22:03:09 2017

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My Review of Once There Did Exist... by odinroark
Neat parallel
I think that was interesting the way you showed how the metaphors that antiquities mythology left in our culture run parallel to the mythology or wild imaginings of our childhood. The two happenings connect to our humanity in much the same way, and their gradual demise renders the same kind of strange melancholy while it stirs a remembrance of innocence. Still these origins that first captivate our imagination are what often spark greater things. I really like the thought and tone of this piece. It's put together in such a way that the two are shown corresponding. The statue drawing a grin of acceptance is a cool way of rounding it off.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Apr 8 12:26:02 2017

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My Review of
~*April Breath*~
by Littlesong
Beautiful
I like the way you ended this one just fine! This is far more overtly spiritual than most of your other pieces. To me "April Breath" seems like it is more of a metaphor for God's presence than the simple change of the season. May His April breath be with you through all of your life's trials! May That love keep you.

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SketerMichaels
Wed Apr 5 09:19:30 2017

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My Review of The Traveler . . . Reworked by RamSlade
Pilgrims regress
Excellent write and phrasing of a pretty nightmarish perspective. To me the American dream is the freedom to pursue whatever dream you want. This is the right bestowed upon us by our Creator. I see and such a light of hope slowly being extinguished and replaced with the things man and his institutions bestow upon us. As we have pursued such a decadent self motivated excessive course, placing our hope in the external, all we achieve is a dark, cyclical gasp of what is allusive and vanishing. I don't know if this is where the collective American dream leads, but judging by the divisions in our nation, we are at a definite crossroads.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Apr 2 21:21:36 2017

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My Review of Balancing Everything Out by RamSlade
Very sage
I'd agree wholeheartedly. If you go down one wrong road, guilt is certain to lead down another one that is just as bad or even worse. We all wish sometimes it didn't take who we were then to get us to who we are now but it's just part of it and you can't dwell on your past. I often think my "unbroken sigh of harmony" might just be my own hard head, but at least I'm able to provide some constant in the universal equation. A nicely considered piece of introspection.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Apr 1 17:26:14 2017

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My Review of Saturday Morning Musing - some childhood memories by SandraMartyres
Forbidden fruit
It's always fun to read things from the other side of the world and recognize how alike we as people really are in our nature. This story could just as easily been a narrative anywhere else and the only variation would be the background and type of fruit. Kids are mischievous and we always prefer what we can't have. I very much enjoyed reading about this fun little remembrance.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 31 23:07:06 2017

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My Review of
Sear With Me~ One Sun
by Littlesong
A new beggining
the first three stanzas are quite searing indeed, but it is the last one that gets most of my attention. It puts a very spiritual spin on an expression of an extremely carnal caress that gives this a duality. I can imagine raptures new meaning in those eyes, those hands building a new world, the soul reborn and bonding, and lovers learning what love must be. That is a truly beautifully veiled concept that your words extend to us my friend. A wonderful piece!

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 31 00:33:04 2017

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My Review of Geographical Entomophagy by JimSlaughter
Very witty
Once more I'm blown over by you're ability to come up with such off the wall ideas and rhymes and still land on your feet. I think some of this foreign cuisine might not be too bad or even pretty good if you can get past what it is. We would be shocked to know what was in a lot of the processed we get at the grocery store, and at least termites, tarantulas, and dragonflies might not be packed with growth hormones and antibiotics the way most of our meat is in this country! A very enjoyable read!

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 31 00:16:45 2017

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My Review of What is Basketball? by richom
I'm with you
I love college sports far more than pro, especially football and basketball. Nothing can match the excitement and the pageantry. My team was FINALLY back in the tournament this year and would have gone farther if not for some VERY questionable calls at the end! But I guess that's the way it goes and the way you see it when you're a fan. You did a very fine job of capturing the spirit of perhaps the most authentically American sport in a well structured, metered, and rhymed poem. Well worth a Spotlight. especially with the Final Four this weekend!

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SketerMichaels
Wed Mar 29 00:36:43 2017

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My Review of Night Wave by JohnCreekmore
Peace be still
Everyone has some sort of storm coming and could interpret and apply what is written here accordingly. I am reminded by this of someone who is facing a cancer diagnosis or some sort of major life jarring trauma. Worse than the event itself which the storm seems to symbolize is the terror from which it draws strength; the unknown. To me that is "the great Ocean around it." When fear has it's way the storm seems to be the "entire sea." Life happens and we really can't stop the forces of nature. The storm isn't evil. However, the horror our perceptions produce during the event are hellish indeed. You've done a good job of conjuring up through the use of metaphor.

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SketerMichaels
Mon Mar 20 20:25:22 2017

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My Review of Blank by RamSlade
Method to the madness
I would interpret the stanzas as being a sort of internal wrestling that goes on with the creative spirit. The couplets seem like a manifesting of all the frustration that no creativity has taken place. This is a completely false notion. The actual creativity is not in the two line epiphany but in the wrestling itself! I like this style you've been experimenting with. I really liked this form when you used it a while back in that piece about the New Orleans bar. You've shown here that your "Septcouplet" isn't just a one trick pony. A good piece here as well.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Mar 19 22:20:38 2017

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My Review of Whispers From the Cellar by JohnCreekmore
Great advice!
I have no idea how figuratively or literally you intended the " denizens of the dark" who like to hang out in the cellar to be taken. Some would say that to believe in such is to give them power. I would say the human perceptions of ""Alone;""Lost;""Too late;" and
"Futile" are the means by which such garner their strength over us regardless of what our belief system might state. The best way I've found to shut the critters up is to start agreeing with them. "Yes" I say, "You all are right in your assessment of me. I'm a piece of work, but...but you still have no right to this!" "This" being the blessed hope that we can not relinquish and is wholly justified. It's a great big God. It's a tiny devil. I sing a bar of "Jesus Loves Me" and start focusing on what happened about 33 AD. That may sound awfully childish, but it shuts'em up. Otherwise, by now they'd have me dead, in jail, a nuthouse, or living on the street. They have no antidote for hope. That's why they have to steal it.

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SketerMichaels
Sat Mar 18 11:48:46 2017

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My Review of
~*Sweet Song*~
by Littlesong
Passionate plea
When I read this all i can say is I am swept into your overtures. It would take a cold heart indeed to say,"No" to such a request. The first stanza reads like someone who is grabbing you by the sleeve to pull you in. I love the lines, "Drown a promise/Deep into my heart/
That in thine I will live." to me that is the difference when souls make love. Another beautiful picture of loves rapture you painted for us Littlesong!

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 10 10:55:22 2017

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My Review of Untitled Piece by augustrush
Powerful
Because words have power. The move toward reclamation is framed as an expressions of pain in a very honest way. I particularly like the final stanza. The process isn't complete until those words are erased, yet the process of erasing memories founded on a false perception are perhaps the most painful thing of all. If this cathartic effort is any indication, I'd say you were well on your way to filling in the blank spaces.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 10 09:11:28 2017

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My Review of Crusaders by JohnCreekmore
You are what you hate. There is black and white but it is in the human heart that shades of gray are found. Judging the motives of others is often where we get pulled into becoming the evil we try to combat. After all, each motive is at the center of the individual and is directed by the self. A pure motive would be selfless, and that's awfully hard to come by. In reality self invariably turns us all into packs of wild apes that march off together in our own familiar troops. Could it be that we hate what is driving evil because we hate what is actually driving our own selves? Another nicely worded piece of thought to get the ball rolling.

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SketerMichaels
Wed Mar 8 07:47:36 2017

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My Review of Married to Two by richom
fiction
Of course, and that's the story we're all to stick with! In the highly, highly unlikely event that this is not just complete hog wash, this beloved you described must be near of kin to a female person I used to know years ago. She of course has no resemblance to the lovely woman I'm married to (in case she's listening). An excellent, breezy fun write and rhyme!

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SketerMichaels
Sun Mar 5 10:46:59 2017

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My Review of One Simple Touch by Valentine
Very nice
I was reading this and it sounds like it could very easily be the lyrics to a popular contemporary church song. At least from my perspective, that is how it resonates best. I don't know what your musical abilities are, but have you considered putting this to a melody? I can imagine hearing these words being delivered on a K-Love station.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Mar 5 10:30:46 2017

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My Review of Brighthelm Community Centre by terrygodwin
Good for you Terry! You made the place sound just like what it's name implies; a center of community. I'm sure the officials who honored and asked you to write such a piece were pleased with the result. This is a well done yet simple utilitarian use of the craft that will probably be around for a long time.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Mar 3 00:43:16 2017

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My Review of
Abounding Love
by Littlesong
Spell bound
My interpretation is this is like a poetic conjuring. Your creating the lover as much as your drawing the lover to you by your words. Commands of creation to bring about the described "scent" akin to "sandalwood." which fulfills a poetic bound. In summation, it is an invitation to the reader, "to shed the world with/My Poetic Love." I think you have done a very nice job of making your call to do so in this piece.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 26 23:12:57 2017

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My Review of Some very honest thoughts on posting and reviewing by Halicen
Agree for the most part
I've found this site to be quite beneficial and have grown from it. Reviewing other people's work has helped me grow more as a writer more than writing the pieces which I decide to post here. One thing I try to do is if there is a spelling correction or some sort of glaring typo, I'll usually not post it in the first comment, but as a tag on the second or message the writer. some people don't care but others might. Regardless, those who just give a slap on the back "Great job, loved it, keep writing" one line review get ignored. That kind of thing benefits no one.
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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 26 20:22:48 2017

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My Review of Where Did All The Writers Go? by Silverblue
Consumer confidence
For me that has been the real issue here.Whoever it is that is responsible for this sight would do a little more to maintain it. No one has updated anything since at least 2015 and every time the site crashes it bleeds a few more off. When I see people make post about how long it takes to get a pro upgrade I wonder if anyone is actually monitoring this site at all. As far as the participants themselves, there are some pretty descent writers here and it's always fun to share your passion with people all around the world. A number of my favorites that I really liked to follow have, as you said, come and gone. It is still a worthwhile venue to connect, but I think the managers really need to do a little something to breath new life into this site and act like it is something they care about. I appreciate you writing this piece to give a way to voice these concerns openly.

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SketerMichaels
Sun Feb 26 15:46:24 2017

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My Review of Happy F****** Birthday! by calsdarkembrace
As a song writer
I've written at least 200 songs in my life from heavy metal to folk and gospel. Sometimes lyrics don't translate to good poetry but I'm not sure at all that is the case with this one. You expressed your point and showed what is true genuine feeling. I don't know you and have never read any of your work that I remember but NEVER be afraid to step out of your comfort zone and try new things. The same person who blasted you on this blasted me and called me narrow minded and judgmental last week for saying I didn't care for slam poetry in the author notes of a poem I'd written. JUDGE NOT LEAST YE BE JUDGED! The previous critique was ridiculous! Bless you young lady and SPOTLIGHT!

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SketerMichaels
Sat Feb 25 10:10:04 2017

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My Review of Bumper Sticker Stupid by BobQuinn
Sometimes
You have to think about what some of those bumper stickers mean, and sometimes I just miss it all together. They have have a longer impact than say a meme on Facebook which essentially do the same thing except you can't click a like button or make a comment on the persons page. You just have to sit and stare at it until the light changes and make judgments about the person's politics, hobbies, religion, sense of humor etc.
Some of the phrases you put down in this poem I can see working and making sense in a bumper sticker's context. I can see a dog lover putting something about herding cats with a pack on their vehicle, or an avid fishermen putting something about bait on the back of his trailer. You have to look at the presentation to understand what they are talking about. Likewise this piece interestingly enough makes a similar demand of the reader, but I think I get what you were trying to say.

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SketerMichaels
Fri Feb 24 20:55:22 2017

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My Review of Keeping the Doors Closed by RamSlade
Painful to consider
I know for myself the pain I've received from past wounds doesn't normally hurt at present because I eventually find ways to forgive others and those doors just don't keep the same bite they once did. The doors I really have to sneak past are the ones where the hurts dwell that I myself have inflicted on others in the past. That is the hardest door to close and the one I tend to visit when no one else is looking. It takes considerable grace from above to move past them. This piece is extremely honest and shows considerable vulnerability.

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SketerMichaels
Thu Feb 23 22:27:00 2017

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My Review of A Trickling Light by RamSlade
20 Trillion in debt
Pure and simple, that is criminal and what we have is unsustainable. As the late great Ronald Reason said, "Government isn't the solution. It's the problem!" Our national fabric and freedom have eroded to a point that the "cracks" are evident to anyone who still cares and has sense enough to see what is coming (a ruthless way of life). I once thought it was crazy talk but If something doesn't change very soon, I see a day when I'll need a significant cache of gold and ammo. I hope the election of Trump finally woke them up enough to realize the American people want this non sense STOPPED and FIXED NOW!

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SketerMichaels
Thu Feb 23 07:26:53 2017

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My Review of Hearts by JohnCreekmore
Check your own
I used to wonder how a mob 2,000 years ago set one thief free and crucified a savior. Now I only pray and ask the Lord to not be part of the same mob. It's easy to do and think you are justified in doing so because ones own justification is the first inclination by nature. In our time social media loves to stoke that inclination so all the different strains of self-righteousness can pool around their own. Regarding our present political situation, Trump isn't a savior or a thief. He is a man of many flaws and virtues and both the flaws and virtues which he posses have resulted in his election to the most difficult job in the world. Another wise thoughtful piece.

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