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JimSlaughter
Wed Apr 26 14:01:43 2017

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My Review of Discourse by JohnCreekmore
Excellent piece, John. I fear. alas, that our fate was "writ on the wall" even long before there were walls to be writ upon.

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JimSlaughter
Wed Apr 26 13:58:25 2017

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My Review of APARA by Malpa
Is this part of the "outback", Malpa? I love the aboriginal names. The last stanza reminds me a great deal of the predicament of our (the U.S.) own indigenous peoples...the few who remain.

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JimSlaughter
Wed Apr 26 13:52:57 2017

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My Review of Awakening by Stella
Part of your "awakening", Stella? Could you have written a piece like this 10, 20 30 years ago? I'd like to believe in that "transitory moment", but, to me, it just doesn't seem at all necessary. Getting through this "layer of consciousness", with as few abrasions and contusions as possible, will be enough for me.
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JimSlaughter
Mon Apr 24 13:52:41 2017

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My Review of Playing Partners by richom
Fictional or not, Richard, this is certainly entertaining. And you roll lots of "strikes" with this piece and others like it.

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JimSlaughter
Sat Apr 22 12:36:53 2017

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My Review of Waiting by Stella
Stella, you are/can be a very evocative and provocative lady. This is a very sensuous piece.

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JimSlaughter
Sat Apr 22 12:32:44 2017

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My Review of My Expiration Date by richom
Is this a conundrum, Richard, or part of the quandary of life? Would it be best/better to know one's "expiration" date, or, as you suggest, "let the mystery unfold"? I rather lean toward the latter. I love surprises. A darkly funny piece.

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JimSlaughter
Sat Apr 22 12:24:15 2017

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My Review of These Songs by vivididol
I'm so glad lyrics are still being written, vivididol. I didn't start noticing songs until, probably, junior high. None of my songs fill me with hunger, or rage, but the ones I/my heart/my soul sing/sings certainly help to get me through the day...and night, sometimes.
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JimSlaughter
Fri Apr 21 14:24:18 2017

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My Review of I Wish You Could Fly by Silverblue
I quite agree with your other commenter, Michael. These words/lyrics fairly float along.
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JimSlaughter
Fri Apr 21 14:18:25 2017

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My Review of You took my Hand by Stella
How wonderful if we (adults) could show affection as easily as children. A delightful piece, Stella. I was rather unprepared for, and very pleasantly surprised by, the ending.

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JimSlaughter
Fri Apr 21 14:12:15 2017

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My Review of Children's War Rhymes by michaelgallatin
Michael, my "fractured" nursery rhymes attempt to put a smile on a reader's face. Yours put a great big lump in this reader's throat. These are heart wrenching...and extremely well done.

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JimSlaughter
Thu Apr 20 14:28:23 2017

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My Review of The Music Played ~ trijan refrain by Stella
Let's face the music and dance! A lovely, melodic, and romantic piece, Stella. I'm glad you added violins...my second favorite instrument. Question: are lines 2 and 3 of Stanza 2 lacking a syllable? They don't read as smoothly as their counterparts in the other two stanzas.

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JimSlaughter
Wed Apr 19 17:23:33 2017

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My Review of Falling In Like by vuriz
Victor, this is simply splendid. I, personally, would much rather be stranded on a desert island with someone I like, rather than with someone I merely love. I do take a small exception to the first paragraph, and the way you distinguish between a "writer" and a "poet". Since there are no new ideas anymore, and everything has been written about countless time, a poet's job, in my opinion, is to take that "obvious crap" and try to paint it with new colors and give it new descriptions. And, hopefully, allow his readers to see it in a new light. BTW, what's up with that one, lone, suspicious question mark?

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JimSlaughter
Mon Apr 17 13:45:47 2017

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My Review of Highway Wars by richom
From three years ago, Ricard, I'd say traffic conditions are not one whit better, but this piece recalls my similar experiences in Los Angeles...35 years ago...and in Houston, TX, 14 years ago...and not one whit better. But nowadays I eschew freeways as often and as enthusiastically as I can. A really enjoyable read.

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JimSlaughter
Sun Apr 16 15:19:18 2017

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My Review of Life is a poem by shar1968
I wish we could/would proofread and edit our lives like a piece of writing, as you suggest, Sharmila. I rather like the idea of life as a poem...most people's, I imagine, would be "free verse". Would you consider not spacing your lines so much?
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JimSlaughter
Sat Apr 15 13:39:49 2017

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My Review of Super Glue by Silverblue
A delightful piece, Silverblue. Are you sure that "mistake" was a mistake? I'd say Aunt Maud got her comeuupance...and then some. I never had this kind of aunt, but plenty who were well-stocked with hugs and kisses and talking and such.

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JimSlaughter
Thu Apr 13 13:03:59 2017

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My Review of Awakened in the Night by RamSlade
I find this more "dark" than "humorous", Jerry. But I like it. It makes me apprehensive, now, that my "death sprite" might just be a "filthy pipe smoker"...or even worse, cigars!
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JimSlaughter
Thu Apr 13 12:58:47 2017

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My Review of Things Understood by JohnCreekmore
I think I understand, John, that even though I may be able to face death without too much resistance, I have a feeling there will be considerable regret that, even as long as I have managed to live, there still was not time to learn and understand all I needed to. A very provocative piece.

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JimSlaughter
Thu Apr 13 12:50:29 2017

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My Review of Crocodile by Silverblue
Enjoyed this one, Silverblue. You've taken a very different approach than I did in my "crocodile" piece. It's hard to imagine these guys have remained around for so long and have changed so relatively little.
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JimSlaughter
Mon Apr 10 14:22:41 2017

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My Review of In A World by michaelgallatin
Michael, if only our leaders were poets and philosophers, what you plead for in this piece might come about. But the world we live in is the one we inherited from our forebears, and the one we'll pass on to our progeny...or what's left of it. The world will/can never change until people do, and that...as history has proved time and time again...is unlikely to happen until the universe (and/or nature) has decided that enough is enough, and we (humans) all have to pull together or perish...forever.

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JimSlaughter
Mon Apr 10 13:36:53 2017

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My Review of Satan and God by richom
Excellent read, Richard. I'm flattered that my little piece could inspire something this "inspired". I suspect this "game" between these two Titans will never cease. Once the sun has burned out enough to no longer support human life in this universe, they'll just move on, create another somewhere, and start the thing all over again. If there is a God and a Satan, then Man is merely a pawn in an eternal game of chess...and there'll never be a winner because the players are too equally matched.

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JimSlaughter
Sat Apr 8 14:04:53 2017

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My Review of The Man Of The Hour by michaelgallatin
Great piece, Michael, and I agree with you wholeheartedly...up to a point. I don't think this action should have been taken on solely by the U.S., unilaterally. It should have been, in my opinion, a UN operation. But, in any event, like you, I'm glad someone did something. And I still think Trump is a "bombastic chump".
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JimSlaughter
Sat Apr 8 13:47:33 2017

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My Review of Armadillo Odyssey by MaryMills
Oh, Mary, takes me back. I was born and reared in Texas, spent some time in Amarillo...real armadillo country...and lived in Houston for seventeen years prior to moving to Missouri. Still a lot of Texas in my soul...I reckin".

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JimSlaughter
Tue Apr 4 13:59:19 2017

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My Review of Purnululu by Malpa
Fascinating...and, though of this world...otherworldly...and the name "Purnululu" has a very exotic flavor to it.

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JimSlaughter
Mon Apr 3 14:49:49 2017

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My Review of Child's I's by MaryMills
Couldn't agree more with your other commenter, Mary. The second stanza is a doozey...and I especially like the aunt's name. I think, though, that the title could stand some "tweaking".

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JimSlaughter
Fri Mar 31 13:35:56 2017

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My Review of I at That by SketerMichaels
The "I's" have it...
Good one, Sketer. Sometimes I try replacing "I" with "one", but it seems so stilted and overly formal. But one can almost always count on that old reliable first person singular pronoun. And the reader never has to ask or wonder, who the heck is this author talking about.

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