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Malpa
Fri Dec 22 05:45:14 2017

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My Review of Defeat Was Not His Will by michaelgallatin
A good story.
Thank you Michael. You've done it again - seeming simplicity underpinned by real depth of insight. Your wolves seem to have a lot of similarities to our dingoes. While I've seen some pretty deprived dingoes around settlements, I've seen some truly magnificent specimens in the wild.

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Malpa
Fri Dec 22 05:35:38 2017

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My Review of A Little Crazy by michaelgallatin
Very effective
Such challenging thoughts held together by the tightness of the meter and rhyming - perhaps a lesson in itself. Is it maintenance of regularity, even routine, that anchors us in times of stress? Thank you Michael. There is real wisdom in this piece.

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Malpa
Wed Nov 29 23:13:47 2017

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My Review of Bitter End by stephen_werdna18
Effective, deep
I like the way you have used structure and rhyming so effectively to support your thoughts. It works well for me.Thank you.

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Malpa
Wed Nov 29 23:05:22 2017

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My Review of I Will Not by RachelMurray
Deep, Challenging
I've kept this for a few more readings Rachel. I sense deeper meaning behind the words. I'm finding it difficult to separate the different thoughts from each other or to know where they each begin and end. I imagine that is the impression you are trying to create, and applaud it, while feeling a personal need for some more punctuation or spacing. Thank you. I'd really like to revisit this after you have spent some more time on it.

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Malpa
Wed Nov 29 22:41:27 2017

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My Review of Let There Be No Mourning by JohnCreekmore
Wise
John, you're making me think again. Life is not about what we achieve but what we contribute? The journey counts more than the destination? ... I sense that still more is being said here. I think I'm going to revisit this poem a few times yet. Thank you.
The succinct, unrhyming couplets work well.

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Malpa
Wed Nov 29 21:35:51 2017

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My Review of The Way That You Feel by michaelgallatin
Thought provoking
You've really addressed the dilemma. How we would all love a world without war but how do we address injustice and bullying at an international level? None of our family has gone into the armed services although we have a son-in-law who was in the Airforce. On technique - the repeating of the same rhyme on the last line of each stanza really works, emphasising the quite terse assertion. Thank you, Michael.

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Malpa
Sat Nov 25 20:22:46 2017

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My Review of Sixties Memories by matelotrod
Fun
What a great and amusing picture of every day life. Most enjoyable.
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Malpa
Sat Nov 25 19:53:51 2017

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My Review of Wrath by JohnCreekmore
Deep, Challenging
John, you've pushed me out into deep water again. I think deeply often, but have not specifically addressed wrath. I wonder - is wrath a form of anger or is anger a manifestation of wrath? You have sown a seed in my mind that will probably grow into some writing of my own. Thank you. I suspect that there may be some more modifications coming over time. Your poem feels like a work in progress.

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Malpa
Sat Nov 25 00:54:10 2017

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My Review of Wanderlust by stellarram
A good return to the site
I too am a wanderer but coming to grips with what I'm still refusing to call old-age. The succinctness of your couplets hides a depth of feeling and understanding that stirred me. Thank you.

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Malpa
Fri Nov 17 01:09:36 2017

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My Review of Into the Valley by JohnCreekmore
Challenging - unsettling
I've always valued that quote from Isaiah. You've built on it excellently stirring me deeply. I found myself almost overcome with despair; then came the assurance of heights after the valley and sunrise after night. Thank you John.

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Malpa
Fri Nov 17 00:37:22 2017

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My Review of Source by JohnCreekmore
Deep stuff
How have you achieved such depth of expression so succinctly? I really relate to both thought and style. Thank you John.

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Malpa
Mon Apr 24 06:30:58 2017

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My Review of New Dawn by Silverblue
Thought provoking
You have a clever and effective use of rhyming couplets. The final one is memorable. I'm noting it in my collection of wisdom.

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Malpa
Sat Apr 22 22:15:48 2017

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My Review of Children's War Rhymes by michaelgallatin
Clever, effective
You've somehow expressed the deepest frustration in a whimsical way - clever. Thank you Michael.

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Malpa
Sat Apr 22 22:09:51 2017

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My Review of Where have all the young men gone? by JimSlaughter
Thought provoking
A moving and thought provoking poem Jim. You have expressed my own feelings so well. This is especially appropriate as I read it a couple of days before our ANZAC Day here in Australia.

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Malpa
Tue Apr 4 02:34:58 2017

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My Review of You Can't Touch The Sun by Silverblue
Thought provoking
Thank you Silverblue. There is a candour and insight here that I admire - great imagery too.

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Malpa
Tue Apr 4 02:28:56 2017

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My Review of Relapsed/ 5 years by Lost-Again
Insightfully disturbing
I almost shuddered as I read your poem Lost-Again. You have written very well indeed.
I really feel as if you've shared real insight with me.

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Malpa
Tue Apr 4 02:04:50 2017

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My Review of Considering the Crafty Crayfish by JimSlaughter
Clever - amusing
I'd never thought of writing about crustaceans, or other creatures for that matter. I'm a little more knowledgeable, if not wiser, and have an idea for some future poem. Thank you Jim.

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Malpa
Tue Apr 4 01:53:36 2017

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My Review of His Love by michaelgallatin
Clever
I never thought of writing a poem in which all lines rhymed. I hope that I'm not like your old man but fear that sometimes I may seem that way. I may try your idea some day, although I'm not very good at rhyming. The exercise could do me good. Thank you - from another John.

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Malpa
Tue Apr 4 01:47:09 2017

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My Review of Yesterdays Tomorrows by Silverblue
Moving
I feel a sadness here for a relationship that has passed, but a firm grasp on realities too.
There are some very rich images - "Hand within hand, sky within sun" and more. Thank you Silverblue.
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Malpa
Tue Apr 4 01:39:13 2017

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My Review of Things Understood by JohnCreekmore
Insightful
Succinctness of expression hiding a depth of wisdom. Thank you John. You have expressed my own philosophy of life so well.

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Malpa
Sat Mar 11 19:48:57 2017

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My Review of Fairies In My Garden by JimSlaughter
effective and moving
I'm moved by this, Jim - a simple richness of imagery that moves me. The stanza "May I never grow too old to dream ..." is going into my record of snippets of wisdom. Thank you.

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Malpa
Sat Mar 11 19:19:07 2017

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My Review of Aging as a Spiritual Practice by RobertRonnow
Challenging
Almost too many layers of meaning to cope with, but I guess that is what you were trying to achieve, Robert. Well done. It is certainly the poem today that has made me pause longest and think most deeply.

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Malpa
Sat Mar 11 19:08:24 2017

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My Review of ~ Moments (Tanka) by NightWriter
Rich imagery
You've confirmed my liking for Haiku. Well written and rich in your imagery. Thank you.

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Malpa
Sat Mar 11 19:01:08 2017

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My Review of Fly Away by Valentine
Moving
I felt moved by the whole poem but that last line really plumbed new depths. Thank you.

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Malpa
Sat Feb 11 20:43:23 2017

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My Review of Hope by DeathKwene
Moving
I can feel myself back in that situation - all the emotions, hopes and uncertainties at the time of bereavement. Your final two lines are very special - "riding raindrops and playing on clouds" - What a picture.

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