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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 12:37:26 2017

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My Review of American Genocide by michaelgallatin
The victors never use the harshest - and truest - words to describe their bad behaviors. We call our WW2 camps "internment camps", instead of "concentration camps". We called genocide of native American's "manifest destiny" for a long time - some still do - and now generally refer to it as an "unfortunate, regrettable consequence of progress".

John Creekmore does have a point that it's important, also - to not turn indigenous people's into god-figures. Not every native society was all that different from the Europeans in terms of violence, and even some of those that were far more peaceful and earth-minded, surrendered their morality to violence at times. On the whole, just for being human beings that deserved just treatment, it was a horrible long series of acts against them. But, also, we did lose an opportunity to learn some valuable ways of living.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 12:25:40 2017

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My Review of What Do We Really Know? by Silverblue
Live and let live, eh? If it could only come so easy for all of us, as it breezes through in the gentle craft of this poem. Maybe, through your pen, some will see that. I hope so. I hope, myself, to be yet better. Thanks.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 12:21:53 2017

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My Review of The Plague Cart by SaintDharumis
Though your wrote this in the art of a yester-century's english, I feel like this vividly describes the desensitization rising to a vulgar high around us in our current lives.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 12:16:58 2017

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My Review of Lightly The Sea Treads by TaroHiryu
Great ending, loved it. "Fear the Day. Not the Night." That is a lot of wisdom packed into a few words. This ties in well to your Honest World Poem.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 12:01:35 2017

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My Review of WHAT I LOVE ABOUT YOU by seriouspoet
"I love your kindness
Because it embraces everyone
Even when they are utterly undeserving"

A more precious trait, it's hard to imagine being shared. Beautiful, and a really sweet poem.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 11:58:07 2017

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My Review of Why do Women Rule? by matelotrod
To quote a Billy Joel song:

"Yesterday wasn't always good,
And tomorrow ain't as bad as it seems."

Reality may have seemed relatively good for you back when, but you also have to travel in others shoes. What you may feel you are losing, perhaps wasn't rightfully all yours to begin.

That being said, woman are hardly in control of society. They're still vastly the minority in positions of power and influence. In the news, man or woman, they're just teleprompter readers. There's no power there, I assure you. But listen, rather than focus on the powerlessness you are perceiving having vs women, you might want to note that most men and women are allies in the same struggle. Most of us have little say in what goes on in the world, and generally no say beyond what our own hands do.
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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 11:49:56 2017

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My Review of Frame Work by ChorumAresus
I hope you can find a way to see beyond the now. Beyond the gun, beyond even what waits inside it's chamber.

Your first stanza, particularly, shows a real talent ("place a hand on any form of sincerity", for example), but more than that it shows just how much life exists inside you, still. Not for a dead spirit can such words come. Hang on. You'll be worth it.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 11:44:23 2017

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My Review of A War Victim's Lament by chrisjtinenuwan
It's terrible, always, the toll of war. The cost is never worth the perceived gain. Many are moved by men behind podiums, whom are moved by dollars behind the scenes. We, when warriors or cheerleaders, are convinced that we're fighting for something more than the monetary gains and desire for control by the few.
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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 11:39:21 2017

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My Review of Honest World by TaroHiryu
Poignant words, as the truth always is; coming at us with a very poetic touch.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 10:37:24 2017

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My Review of American Pride 2 by HungGarKid
"Because the rules do not apply when you're the boss"

Oh, how sadly true. A lesson we all need to come to learn, the sooner the better.

That entire stanza, by the way, was pretty spectacular. Strong, potent visuals, such as a melting statue of liberty. Also, I do appreciate the nod to what really happened to the Towers, earlier in your poem.

I hope you still intend to write here. Your voice is needed and appreciated. Certainly by someone like me.

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lyrycsyntyme
Tue Nov 14 10:21:23 2017

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My Review of Bleeding Lies, Breathing Lines by RachelMurray
Wow. The intensity just grew and grew, cased in quite a few great metaphors along the way. My favorite, your placement and usage of "drowning in moonlight." So vivid in it's context.

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lyrycsyntyme
Wed Oct 18 03:29:10 2017

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My Review of A Spark That Never Lit by blossomwriter
Some wonderful, striking lines. "If only something could lift these desires" really struck home with me, but heaviness of your closing is worthy of at least as much praise.

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lyrycsyntyme
Fri May 6 16:40:24 2016

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My Review of IT IS...BUT by yemiraj
Our refinement is most of whom we are, isn't it.

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lyrycsyntyme
Fri May 6 15:14:31 2016

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My Review of Hold My Hand by SimpleReBirth
This feels like a song. It'd make a nice piece of music, with the right composition to support it's beautiful aura : )

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lyrycsyntyme
Fri May 6 15:10:23 2016

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My Review of No Longer Yet Forever by JimSlaughter
Indeed : ) Perhaps a secret that we can learn pieces of, slowly over time. But I nod to your sentiments; it would take an eternity to understand it whole.

Wonderful meter and poetic flow in this write. The flow really peaked here:

"That shake mere mortals
To their very mortal souls?"

And brought it home : )

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lyrycsyntyme
Fri May 6 03:54:04 2016

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My Review of Rainbow by bickerstaffe
It truly does seem as if the rainbow is some ambassador sent from the sky to the earth below, to announce across the land that the rain and sun are a tandem blessing. Very beautiful, classical poem about one of the most inspiring natural phenomenon's in existance.

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lyrycsyntyme
Fri May 6 03:18:22 2016

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My Review of Paradoxical Friend (Raw) by GreyCadence
"She who knows my thoughts and actions.... yet could very well be a shadow of my imagination."

I really loved this line. You know, sometimes what we've loved about someone is whom they made us feel we knew, not whom they really were. Maybe it's because we projected, or maybe it's because we saw their greatest potential, their purest being. Maybe, even, what we see in them is a reflection of the pureness of the love they somehow inspired in us.

Your poem is very thorough, and that seems representative of your internal struggle. I understand the struggle of having to try to answer so many questions on your own; I've lived through loving another whom feared love. I can't say you'll ever get or find the answers to her actions, and if she wishes not to then it is best to respect that - no matter how hard - but I think you'll come to better understand your own actions, feelings, and why you've loved her, in time. Wishing you all the best along that road.



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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 01:13:56 2016

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My Review of Feelings better left unsaid by MayfordVC
The third stanza of this one is it's bread and butter. Especially the cigarette metaphor. The second stanza is a nice transition, it' changes the pace leading into the third. The first stanza could use some work, poetically. If the flow and meter of the first stanza was panned out, I think the whole poem would be set : )

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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 01:06:12 2016

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My Review of NOT THE MASTER by Filmgirl39
Is there any true "master" or "expert" on anything in the world? : ) I think some of us are just a little further into childhood, in one area or another, than average. At least in the eye of the universe : )

Look forward to reading on, when you post more of the story.

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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 00:38:00 2016

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My Review of The Brave of the Sage by Filmgirl39
I have to say that I thought this made quite a bit of sense. It's a patient read, setting the reader up for the closing pair of lines, but attention to the detail of every line is key. I found it eloquent, deep, and well thought out.

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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 00:29:28 2016

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My Review of Student Success - A Found Poem by Fennixx
"Make yourself employable
Experimental, theoretical and practical"

I feel there's a contradiction in these words, that you point out with this work. Can anyone be experimental and practical at the same time, and do so earnestly? I'm not sure. How can we know what is practical without having experimented first? But I think you draw on this with the second stanza.

I like what you did. I wasn't familiar with the term "found poem" before this, so I read it just as is(which, I imagine, I should do anyway), and it held up well to me in the non-restrictive world of poetry : )

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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 00:23:03 2016

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My Review of Forgotten by vivididol
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"Your train of thought that goes nowhere
Don't accept no passengers."

For that pair of lines alone, reading this was totally worth it. But yet, your song offers even more. More, lyrically, and sonically. You have a tremendous ability in utilizing meter and flow.

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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 00:16:39 2016

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My Review of The sun don't shine by vivididol
Pretty, truthful song
"They care more for rocks than for seeds"

That is a great line, and I feel it's one that could go below almost any large corporation's logo as their true mission statement, not to mention as the slogan for any famous presidential candidate "Vote for so and so in 2016 - Care more for rocks than seeds."

"Our rivers are poisoned with sorrow.
The Swallows won't come back again."

These two lines are also so beautiful, in all of their sadness. The whole song is just beautiful in flow, on the whole. I hope it gets set to music. People should hear it : )



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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 00:12:19 2016

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My Review of THE SIRENS OF THE SEAS by babyboomer68
This poem should be sent back to the Age of Sea Exploration(Conquest). You do such a good job telling the story as if you were born along the shores of Spain in the 14 or 1500's.

The flow of the poem picks up as it goes on. It really started to catch on in the second stanza. I love the feeling of the flow as it leads into the last line and the theme, "the sirens of the sea".

For your consideration, the poem might flow better if every 2 lines in the opening stanza were joined together into 1. All in all, it's a work I enjoyed, none the less : )

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lyrycsyntyme
Thu May 5 00:04:52 2016

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My Review of LISTEN by jonni-inferno
Beautiful song. I've never thought to write lyrics that way (except over composition), but the way you used dashes to stretch out and break apart words - even single syllables - really helped me hear it. I loved that.

The second verse was truly gorgeous imagery, even in all it's pain.

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