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michaelgallatin
Fri Dec 8 12:34:48 2017

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My Review of Rigor Mortis by werewolf117
Almost gave this...
a 3.5 but decided on 4 because I like the genre and the shock value is decent. On the downside and no offense meant - "more, more, more" seems a bit comical (what about something like "They still keep coming on for more.") and you spelled "stench" wrong twice. Plus, and this is only my opinion, from someone who goes by the name of "werewolf" I'd expect a werewolf poem. This clearly is a zombie attack which is fine so maybe I'm overdoing my expectation.

Namaste,
Mike

PS - Where in the Hell is Darryl Dixon when you need him?

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michaelgallatin
Tue Dec 5 12:41:15 2017

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My Review of A State of Mind by JohnCreekmore
But beyond recognition...
it's how those feelings are viewed and interpreted. Like I can see a "bum" on the street and say that there but for the grace of God go I. Someone else may see the same man and view him as dirty, degenerate and despicable. So I think it goes beyond recognition to what is made personally of that recognition and that can be vastly different. For instance the competition for gold, ground and glory can lead to exploration, creativity and healthy competition. Or it can lead to war, subjugation, slavery, etc. So I see this as a fine poem but rather incomplete due to how the recognition plays out in each mind.

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Sat Dec 2 13:00:15 2017

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My Review of Poetstien by PoetGLG123
No offense meant as...
I like your writing my new, young friend but proofread before you present! Not to be overly critical but small errors noted include that you want; "you're" in the first line of Verse Two and twice in Verse Three, "it hurts" in Verse Three, "without" in Verse Four is one word and "til" has only one L. I hope I don't come off as a jerk pointing these things out but it is important to check before you post. Especially if you want anything close to perfection Sir. The overall content is brilliant as it presents a poet having difficulty and trying to find out where he fits into society. And very frankly, don't effing worry! Be yourself and people will like you for who and what you are. And those who don't, meh! Let them go their own way and good riddance!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Sat Dec 2 12:34:36 2017

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My Review of The Meeting in the Amphitheater by PoetGLG123
You have an interesting..
style, wording and viewpoint, quite deep where I think I appear more straightforward. I'm not "knocking" how or what you write, we are just different. I do like what I've read of yours. When I was younger, people used to say poetry was rather effeminate. And I would reply, "total crap!" Were Poe, Whitman, Frost and so many other men effeminate? I think not! Poetry is not for the effeminate or the weak. It is for anyone who enjoys it and draws feeling and/or meaning from it! And people do listen. For instance, when I die, I intend to "rage against the dying of the light". And in my life, "two roads diverged in a wood and I, ...I took the one less traveled by and that has made all the difference." The last line of this poem also gets to me though I am not very religious in the traditional sense. Life as "a seductive rehearsal". Apparently for death and whatever comes after I would assume. Nice writing Sir!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Sat Dec 2 12:14:43 2017

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My Review of The Home by PoetGLG123
Short but well said!
Just one slight observation and this could be from my own viewpoint young friend. A shooting star is anything but static! It may appear brief but it is not static. Static implies lack of movement, stuck in the same spot, immobile. A shooting star appears to move quickly through a small part of the sky. The only person so far who I have shared watching them with is my beautiful daughter, Alyssa. And oddly when estranged from my family for some time last year and living in another state, I went to a Moon Goddess discussion in someone's backyard near a large park. While there I saw shooting stars and it was suggested to me that my daughter could be a living spirit guide. Apparently they aren't all ghost animals! Anyway shooting stars are beautiful like my daughter, real love and this short poem of yours!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Thu Nov 30 11:16:45 2017

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My Review of Bitter End by stephen_werdna18
Not sure my friend if...
we've met before or not. Must be premature senility if we have Sir! At any rate I like your motto, your quote and this poem a lot. The end of this was a bit of a surprise which shows how well done this piece is. On a personal note I'd probably have softened the ending a bit so it's not so "bitter". If the person is finally accepting of their death, wouldn't there be perhaps sadness over life lost but also a definite touch of peace?

Namaste,
Mike

PS - Maybe at the age of 69 I'm more accepting of the idea of death than a young man of your age. I still intend to "rage against the dying of the light" but I will be looking for peace!

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michaelgallatin
Thu Nov 30 11:06:21 2017

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My Review of I Will Not by RachelMurray
"Malpa" is right on!
This is a deep, introspective and soul-searching poem. A piece about looking very closely inward at who and what you are and tempering what you find with wisdom, purpose and understanding. My friend Jeff, very much into Zen, meditation, mindfulness, etc., would love this. I like the wording a lot except for not being sure about the "dull eyes". I get that too I think but I believe someone on such an introspective journey would have deep and soulful eyes. At any rate it's a fine poem and SL worthy!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Tue Nov 28 11:38:21 2017

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My Review of "and the angels sang" by Malpa
Honest and pure!
One of the things I like the most is the honesty right from the start. The "I'm not a believer anymore" yet somehow this touched me and did so deeply and profoundly. In my life I've gone from Protestant to Agnostic to Spiritualist/Humanist so the feeling expressed here rings very true for me. Last year I was sadly estranged from my family for three months and living in Maryland. It wasn't all bad though. One evening I went to a Moon Goddess presentation. Most but not all was American Indian themed and it was fantastic, an ethereal and shared experience. I do believe that I felt close to "God" at that time, much closer than usual. So yes, your poem comes to me loud and clear and SL worthy. You are lucky to have had this fine experience!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Tue Nov 28 11:25:39 2017

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My Review of Dear fighters, thank you by YogeetaGhansam
It depends dear girl!
Your country gained independence in 1966, the year I graduated from highschool. And it became a republic in 1970 when I finished my first four years of college. Good going for Guyana and a chance for you to be born and to live in an independent country. So, good luck to you in college and whatever career you choose. But I said "it depends" so why did I say that? My philosophy is honor the soldier but abhor the war. Yet some wars are needed to fight oppression and gain independence for instance. Others are often fought due to such things as prejudice and greed. I don't like any war but those that are necessary serve a positive purpose. The others make me very angry and sad. Yet unless the soldiers are merely bloodthirsty killers who enjoy their role despite the reason for their fighting I do support the soldiers. For those reasons I liked your poem a lot (SL worthy) but I do draw some lines young lady.

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Mon Nov 27 13:03:25 2017

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My Review of Let There Be No Mourning by JohnCreekmore
A very interesting...
and thought-provoking poem. I much prefer to raise the flags (for a just cause of course), count the coins (I don't need to be rich but money helps) and kiss the lips (now we're at the best one). But I do suppose that in the long run of life these things don't tip the scale all that much. But I will tell you something that does and I did it as a profession for over 40 years and I do it now because it's part of me. That would be helping others less "well-off" than yourself. It not only makes me feel good, not so much prideful as happy and whole. But I firmly believe that in this often insane world we need to stand together or fall and die alone. So, perhaps well done but possibly could be improved upon!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Fri Nov 24 11:48:45 2017

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My Review of Old Mail Road by Malpa
A beautiful poem!
And a setting that could be an old, country road pretty much anywhere in the world. There is, as others have stated, nothing wrong with the fine rhyming you've done here. But what appealed to me even more is the simplicity of the wording. Brevity of description and yet so well done that the reader could be there easily. I'm a "city-boy" but I love the beauty and peace of the countryside. So I would most definitely love Old Mail Road! Well done!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Fri Nov 24 11:35:37 2017

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My Review of A War Victim's Lament by chrisjtinenuwan
Wolf or husky?
Whichever, it's a beautiful animal! Mine is very definitely a wolf. Your poem is magnificent and heart-wrenching, so true and so sad. Two very minor things I noticed - you want "were filled" in Line 3 and "their families" in Line 10. The overall poem is brilliant and the repetition of "brother" is skillful and meaningful. In my own life I have gone from Protestant to Agnostic to Spiritualist/Humanist. And in that journey I came to see that all religions believe in a supreme being or supreme beings and to be decent to your follow man. In other words that there is some sort of a benign (and hopefully loving) higher power and we are all in this together. Even were there no god or gods, wouldn't it be more intelligent to get along rather than to kill eachother? Sadly it appears we missed that logic! A fine poem and one I wish that I had written, spotlight worthy!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Tue Oct 17 13:28:46 2017

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My Review of The Heavens Closed Their Eyes by ArtSun
Sadly spot on...
and needing to be said over and over again until people all over the world get it! Why? That is the major question! Why? Why must it forever be like this? My father was a soldier in WWII, also a Jew. OK, he helped to fight and vanquish Germans who sadly supported Hitler. That I can understand! My son in the Marines helped to rid Iraq of Hussein and his sons. Somewhat understandable too though I think US reasons for going there were less altruistic than that. I often tend to support the soldier and abhor the war. This is a great anti-war poem! I have composed quite a few myself. Well said and the soundtrack adds to it! A definitely perfect poem and one that deserves a SL!

Mike

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michaelgallatin
Tue Oct 17 13:15:39 2017

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My Review of A Spark That Never Lit by blossomwriter
There's sadness in this!
I like this poem and its imagery but it makes me feel very sad. The end suggests a hopelessness that light will never shine through. Well penned for this day and age but so very sad! And in Verse 3 I believe you want "they're" and a question mark at the end.

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michaelgallatin
Fri Jun 9 17:13:47 2017

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My Review of Clichés to the broken by fraido
Simple yet profound!
When a poet can compose something so very meaningful in extremely understandable words that catch the reader that's really something. This poem does that in spades! And my friend there are too many broken in this sick and sad world. Perhaps clichés but if truly felt perhaps not! This piece is well worth the spotlight I'm putting it in for.

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Tue May 30 14:38:24 2017

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My Review of Ramble On (Song of an Old Bard) by SketerMichaels
Thank you so much!
This poem makes me think of two people, one fictitious and one real. The former is "my minstrel who I write about often. The latter is Gordon Lightfoot who is 79 year-old this year and still touring. Thank you for a splendid poem!

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michaelgallatin
Tue May 23 18:17:36 2017

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My Review of LOVE by seriouspoet
Yes and no
I agree that if you use the word "fuck", this poem should not have a G rating. It should be marked as Explicit. And "Mankind" I think is capitalized as it is a noun inclusive of all people on Earth. I definitely get the idea of this piece as it is put forth very strongly. I do feel though that the ending is rather strong and perhaps too broad. Though I am very cynical myself I certainly don't feel most parents are like this though some are and others are even worse. It gets the point across but to me seems a bit overdone or maybe it just caught me that way today. I don't feel most people are drunk, drugged, stupid, evil or even apathetic. I think most feel very overwhelmed, the "what can one person do" syndrome. Too bad we all can't get together to accomplish what's right!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Mon May 22 09:55:07 2017

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My Review of Another year older (Birthday 2017) by JimSlaughter
I was tempted...
to rate this a 1 for your making us wait to get an answer! But I figured that was mean so I gave it a 5 out of empathy and turning 69 in July. A poem I can well relate to. Thanks!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Mon May 22 09:50:58 2017

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My Review of Ponder by Silverblue
Deserves at least 15!
Wish I could give it that! Another SL, beautifully penned! I wish I had written this because it is wonderful. I'm 69 this July and we do look back. Even more as we grow older. This is a finely done poem about doing that and its written with compassion and understanding.

Bless you,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Mon May 22 09:45:01 2017

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My Review of Seek by Silverblue
Very nice read!
"It's hard to be truly amazed." This becomes so sadly true as we grow older. But I watch my two year-old granddaughter and she seems amazed at everything around her. It's so very wonderful to see! She's interested and exuberant. She has fun and laughs, even at herself. She's playful, excited and energetic and so much is new for her. It's too bad that most adults don't hold onto much of this feeling. We tend to lose a lot. I love being with Lilly because then I recapture this attitude toward life for at least awhile! This poem speaks well of that feeling so thank you! Putting it in for a well deserved spotlight!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Fri May 19 10:01:26 2017

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My Review of Hymn To The Rising Sun by ALEXJLOCKWOOD
This took some study,...
time and hard work! Hence the five for both that and the beauty of the poem. Thank you for the English translation. And so very odd but pleasant that I found this upon a day when I am wearing an ankh. I have worn them on and off since my college days a very long time ago. The symbol for everlasting life. The Romans took off the top oval making their cross a T. Then the Christians added back a top piece again. I always found that interesting how this occurred. At any rate it a beautiful symbol of love and peace and this is a fine and masterful poem my friend! Well worthy of the spotlight I have put in for!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Fri May 19 09:48:50 2017

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My Review of elfqeenas friends on writers network. by wench70
I am honored...
to be the first poet to comment upon this posting! I do remember elfqueena by that name though I honestly don't recall how much of her poems I read. I am sure I must have read some for I have been here around five years. Other than being a poet which is mostly a beloved hobby I spent over forty years doing Social Work and Healthcare. I helped a large number of elderly people move into decent nursing homes. The trick is in picking one where the patients/residents are well cared for. Judging from your kind and sweet posting I find it very likely that you did that. You are right that it is an extremely hard choice to make. Yet it can become the best choice to get needed care for a loved one. Again from what you have written here I believe you chose to find that quality of care for your mother and that she understands that. Visit her often to show your love and she will adjust to life there well. Maybe even make some new friends! Do not second guess your well thought out decision. Bless you, her and your family! Peace!

Namaste,
Mike

PS - I put this bulletin up for a spotlight to hopefully increase its being seen here!
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michaelgallatin
Thu May 18 10:01:21 2017

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My Review of Mirror World by SAnthonyH
This reminds me...
a little of a poem I posted on 12/1/12 (I checked) called Going Bloody Insane. I didn't see a twin in my mirror though. I saw my face turned into a nightmare. I like this poem. It has a similar feel of going insane. I had to look up the word "verst", a unit of distance in Russia. And the end gives the reader pause to wonder. You don't get the connection to dear Donald in the poem though. Also a bit hard (no offense meant) to get the "you are your own worst enemy" idea when there's a childlike grin and gentle calm. All and all a fine and strange poem though!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Wed May 17 13:01:26 2017

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My Review of Life Extension by matelotrod
It all depends...
upon the aging process (physical and mental) as it affects you and how that in turn affects your quality of life. Some people have messed themselves up before they hit forty or fifty. Others are mentally in good shape and fit for their age at eighty. It centers around how you handle your life as well as what life dishes out to you. Good poem though and I hope I stay generally OK awhile. I hope you do too my friend! Good luck!

Namaste,
Mike

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michaelgallatin
Tue May 16 18:39:27 2017

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My Review of Let It by SketerMichaels
How can something...
that seems so simple really be so profound my friend? Well said, warm, inspirational and a very pleasant read as I returned here. Thank you! Also a definite spotlight!

Namaste,
Mike

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