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Rory
Wed Feb 14 11:48:52 2018

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My Review of Moonlit Words by RachelMurray
history of the moon
Beautiful use of the moon as an evocative device. Generations come and go, wars, lovers in his moonlight, and if he were alive he had watched it all but stayed the same. He lit the sky for tragedy and beauty. It is as black as ink between the stars and does the universe know we exist. I believe the Creator of the universe most certainly knows everyone who has ever existed. What is the moon through the eyes of a wolf or orca. Does it inflame the heart of beast as well as man or is it just a shiny disc, a light.

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Rory
Tue Feb 13 10:04:37 2018

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My Review of She Wears a Pine Tree on Her Sweater by babyboomer68
salt of the earth
These days we seem to try and hide our old people, find a place for them and let other people look after them. Your poem honors this elder woman as she becomes both a metaphor for how we should treat aging people, and our environment. It is her beauty within that captivates us. Items such as a diamond willow walking stick supply great interest.

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Rory
Mon Feb 12 19:53:39 2018

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My Review of Always Today by BobQuinn
exposing nostalgia
Sufficient unto the day is the evil thereof. Sometimes we do, as you rightly infer--reading happiness into history can be romantically untrue--forget that the 'good 'ol days' are just as well gone. But hectic stresses of today still make us yearn nostalgically for bygone days.

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Rory
Mon Feb 12 19:43:24 2018

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My Review of I Tell You by RachelMurray
compact meaning
You don't wear lipstick on the soul. That's a pearl worth keeping. Reminded me of the term' 'diamond in the rough'. Many of us, including yours truly, are caught off guard when we look in the mirror one day and suddenly realize we are old---er. Older. What have we got in the bank that doesn't get old, only better. Well done.

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Rory
Mon Feb 12 19:34:44 2018

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My Review of An Odd But True Friendship by michaelgallatin
two wild ones
Running wild seems the theme, man in vicarious unity with raw nature. No overly anthropomorphic sentimentality, just decent license taken to portray your two intriguing characters. Very dignified poem, captivating by keeping both man and beast most free.

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Rory
Mon Oct 12 12:49:52 2015

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My Review of When The Child Wakes by TonyD
I hope the invaders of this tranquility, so aptly and sensitively portrayed, read and weep. Good stuff really. Raw nature knows with minimal tending how to express the beauty of flowers--many of what we call weeds are beautiful if we drop the learned prejudice--and God told us to contemplate the lilies of the field arrayed in splendor. But we, the ones endowed with a brain, opposing fingers and thumbs, and so forth must shackle potential instead of setting the stage to guide young life through intriguing purposeful meaning. No surprise that we remember our favorite teachers. Thanks friend
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Rory
Sun Oct 11 17:06:54 2015

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My Review of Reborn by bickerstaffe
thoughtful and deep
What a good way to depict the disappointment leading to despair---Winter, it says so much in one word. And we will wither if something does not come into our life to change things. Yes fragrance diminishes and color--everything takes on tones of grey. Thank God, if we're open the slightest to a positive person or event, it's a new day every morning.

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Rory
Sun Oct 11 16:56:48 2015

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My Review of Sol Invictus (The Beacon of Salvation) by ALEXJLOCKWOOD
striking
Worship appears to be inevitable. Even Bob Dillon said 'you gotta serve somebody'. Without Divine direction or perhaps by refusing it, ancient civilizations developed systems of theology and not surprisingly the power of the blazing sun took prominence. Excellent onomatopoeia(had to look up the spelling)in the 'shadowy army of the night', then contrasted quickly with the song of birds triumphantly welcoming another day. Scholarly clerics such as Dr. Sanderson and Dr. Donne were so well versed in this type of classic history and like you knew that the wisdom, beauty and inspiration can be garnered without compromising one's own religious belief system. Thank you

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Rory
Tue Oct 21 23:21:15 2014

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My Review of Number, Please by Angelquill
humorous and poignant
Just excellent in the setup for the ultimate message. A wonderful description of modern day communications, so impersonal and aloof, kind of cold really. You get the readers' interest and then gently tell about a Savior who waits patiently for us to open the door of our hearts. I know others will have read your poem--hopefully someone who is not as yet saved and who will not forget the message. Thank you, Rory
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Rory
Tue Oct 21 23:10:08 2014

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My Review of The Winged Hound by sicky666x
intense imagination
At first I didn't want to review your poem; I am a Christian--and I don't want to sound condemning because I have no judgment about you as a person. As a writer you are dedicated and very good. You certainly allow your mind to expand and explore vistas beyond the ordinary. Only you can decide if you will always wrap yourself in occult or dark matter. You appear to know that spirit existed before matter; I should let you know, in as gentle terms as possible, that a scintilla of light reflected from the first Spirit can enter a door opened just a little by the child of the universe who takes a chance.
Thank you again for this imaginative, thoughtful poem. Rory
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Rory
Tue Oct 21 22:44:58 2014

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My Review of Weekly fair by shar1968
intriguing
This is good art. Somehow, with few but well chosen words and phrases, you take me to a sunny, bustling marketplace full of interest and imagination. It's as if people watching is the main sport, not so much buying stuff. Where a writer sees opportunities to gather information for the next story or poem. The free verse is like impressionistic art. More about design and color than an exact depiction. Makes us imagine. Thank you, Rory
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Rory
Sun May 4 18:36:41 2014

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My Review of Life as I see now by Jeena
excellent
This poem is so full of hope for any reader. Maybe it's time to just stop, no matter what road we're on, and take a clear look at where we've been and where we're going. Don't take things so seriously--there's 'pebbles' enough for everyone and we don't have to make them into boulders. We can start over any time we want, even if the circumstances are the same--it's our attitude that can change. I like it just fine. Thank you, Rory
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Rory
Sun May 4 18:26:40 2014

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My Review of
~GOOD VS. EVIL~
by LonelyKingJames
well done
Good writing often troubles the reader--it should impact one's thoughts or what's the use? We will disagree about the battle within because it is far too organic in my opinion, That is, we do indeed struggle with good and bad tendencies, but I believe as a Christian we need to go beyond ourselves to a place where no time exists. Before one atom of the universe existed, the first cause, God/Jesus existed in a manner beyond our comprehension. Once accepted as Savior, Jesus takes control of the matter of good and evil because He triumphed over evil on the Cross. His Name inside the soul of a true believer effectively excludes the power of evil. All that's left to do is believe it deep inside especially when old mistakes and horrible decisions from our past life rise up to trouble our new life. Your poem is excellent for what it portrays and definitely gets one thinking. Keep it up, God bless, Rory
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Rory
Sun May 4 12:45:24 2014

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My Review of The captive land by swila97
excellent
Is 'heavenly hut' a place of worship? I suppose it could be but also any sanctuary where we hide out, including our own minds numbed with bitterness and cynicism. We opt out because we don't know what to do--but the simple sincere cry to God 'help us' will be heard. A very good poem to light a fire in our hearts for the needy. Thanks, Rory
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Rory
Thu Apr 24 20:54:22 2014

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My Review of AND PILATE TREMBLED by failte
Awesome
I have heard a lot of preaching and your insight is terrific. You see the depth of our Lord's suffering and His perfect love. There is a river and He is risen indeed. Thank you, Rory
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Rory
Thu Apr 24 17:22:06 2014

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My Review of I am the Truth by elfqueena
excellent
Presented very forcefully yet peacefully. God bless, Rory
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Rory
Thu Apr 24 15:17:16 2014

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My Review of Silence Shouting by odinroark
excellent
Brings to mind the helpless feeling I experience when viewing poverty. The massive train invades, rolling through, safely sheltering the passengers from the gangs, drugs and other poverty realities. Nicely worded to depict the trap of structural and intergenerational factors that affect the poor. The blurred images, silently shouting, is powerful.
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Rory
Tue Apr 15 10:50:39 2014

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My Review of FIRE by hobopoet
very good
I enjoyed your use of fire as the metaphor for past history as well, it seems to say, burning the bridges that might bind us negatively to the past. A good thing about this poem is that each reader will take away a different meaning because fire is so volatile and unpredictable. Thanks, Rory
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Rory
Tue Jan 14 12:59:12 2014

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My Review of Persistence (Bitten By Life) by Catrin_Jane
excellent
Why try to reinvent ourselves for the sake of pleasing others; like Popeye said 'I am what I am'. so take it or leave it. Sure, we have new iterations of self as we go through life's stages but it will be on my terms and I will choose which fork in the road to take. That is, of course, if I'm not up to my yin yang in making ends meet for me and my children. But we should dream our own dreams--nobody can take them, I think.
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Rory
Tue Jan 14 12:52:32 2014

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My Review of A Tune in June by ODioMio
very good
Very nice --if you have children they are lucky--or grandchildren, or nieces or nephews or neighbours
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Rory
Tue Jan 14 12:48:46 2014

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My Review of To Soar by EvaRocks
excellent
Nice spiritual theme. Giving is certainly the portal to happiness. You are helping people to let go of the burdens that we cling to because they are familiar. Take a chance, let go. Soar
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Rory
Thu Jan 17 10:51:38 2013

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My Review of If Pigs Could Fly by michaelgallatin
makes me think
Nice dream. As a 'religious person' Christian that is, I look forward to a great day.
Iidealistic yearning contrasted with a rude awakening in a context of fantastic imagery; your writing takes us to a better place and then not too hard of a landing--I sense your hope prevailing over the darkness(as 20 new little angels are brilliantly shining and illuminating the darkness of gun culture). Just had to throw that in.
I see alcohol as a metaphor for social destructive forces but I sense you have actually seen drugs and alcohol destroy lives. Anyway thanks for using this old phrase to entertain and provoke. Rory
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Rory
Thu Jan 17 09:20:41 2013

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My Review of La Mancha by SanExpeditus
the highest order
In my youth I lived in the streets of Malaga and was a vagabond along the Costa del Sol before the tourist boom. There's something about the Spanish sun and to this day(over 40 years ago) the good impression remains. There is an essential luminosity, much like a watercolourist would use, depicting the arid yet fertile scenery. The subtle contrast of liquid references is beautiful. Amazingly, you decry even lament that language must be used at all; but I'm so happy that you succeeded in penning a few words for our enjoyment. Thank you, Rory
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Rory
Sun Jan 13 08:46:56 2013

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My Review of The Wide Grey Sea (13/01/13) by ALEXJLOCKWOOD
excellent
Reminds me of Dickens's. metaphor in Dombey and Son when the boy Paul dies. If you have not read it I recommend it(the excerpt should be easy to find)
You have used the power and vast expanse of the ocean to great effect.
Seems ironic/paradoxical that this entity that can and has brought death
and destruction is a source of peace. God bless you. Rory
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Rory
Thu Dec 20 08:52:39 2012

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My Review of She's Not Alone by michaelgallatin
excellent
I think this poem speaks to many people. God bless you for working with the elderly. You used the Christmas tree as a metaphor of a life and it worked with great effect. Isolation seems to creep insidiously as we age, depending upon our relationship circumstances, especially in this era where the extended family is not together in one residence. The children move away, usually for employment reasons. One comment on the writing; you had a good point to make and felt the need to 'explain' in the body of the poem. Make us, the readers, think toward your point with the power of your chosen words--some mystery to ponder. Rory
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