darkdragonhunter
Wed Apr 18 10:58:35 2012
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| My Review of Blades by
CloudNumber9
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Really Good  |
| I love your word choice and use of differnt words. I also love how you paint an image and then paint another, but you never leave the main point or theme. I loved the poem and hope to read more of your work. |
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darkdragonhunter
Wed Apr 18 10:49:18 2012
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| My Review of Liam (ch. 1) by
AmberIsSmiling
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Pretty good.  |
| I thought the story was great, but the sentences were kind of choppy and incomplete. You stopped in random places and then went on. If this was the way you ment to write it though, I apologize for interjecting my thoughts. Also, when you say "Hes too good for me," you need to put a punctuation mark in He's. |
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