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seraph1420
Sun Jun 16 02:36:18 2013

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My Review of All I Owe by dheekhaye
I actually like the thought in here. some grammatical errors here and there but those can be corrected. other than that, you do need to work on ending this piece. it just has this abrupt ending. I hope you understand. otherwise, it's a good piece.
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 16 02:30:21 2013

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My Review of Send Me Some Magic by martinos74
magical
narrating some story in a poem is a pretty challenging task, you succeeded.
well done
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 16 02:27:08 2013

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My Review of "Remaining Echoes" by Valentine
wonderful
this is really something great, I must say. the way in which you represented the darker side is remarkable.
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 11:19:51 2012

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My Review of THE SEARCH by JudyBall
that is really good. the flow, the rhythm everything is great. there are some spelling errors in here and you might just wanna check those. other than that, it's perfect!
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 11:15:11 2012

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My Review of Widdershins by dlpaget
that was amazing. you have told the story in such a great way. rhyming it at the same time, that is art!
great job
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 11:05:17 2012

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My Review of Am I defeated? by Allan
that is wonderful. one of the best rhymes, perhaps. but if you ask for feedback, then here it is - your rhyme scheme is aabb and i think it could have been better if it had been abab. so, maybe you wanna try that. other than that you have used the word 'world' in two consecutive lines so, maybe, you wanna edit either one.
but still, i loved your piece. it is absolutely brilliant
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 10:59:13 2012

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My Review of B-school by lalipenz
full of love, emotion and what not! the words say it all. brilliant job. "I fold you...in a letter" you nailed it!
bravo
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 10:56:00 2012

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My Review of Surrendered kiss by lalipenz
that is absolutely brilliant! how do you do that! that is so great. from the first word till the last your piece makes the writer glued to the screen. i am so speechless and guess what, i read that three times! i still can't get over from its hangover!
you nailed it
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 10:43:11 2012

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My Review of Of Pride by Synchro
i have no words to describe it. it's one of the best free verses i have ever read!
i haven't said it for a long time now but here it goes - worth reading, not once, not twice, but a million times!
you nailed it!
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 01:12:05 2012

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My Review of Hope Embraced by Caroline
that is absolutely wonderful! i don't know how you do it but you do it pretty well actually really well! you are oh so good. this piece has just no fault in it. it is absolutely perfect!
my favorite line -
"I need a beginning or at least an end"
you nailed it!
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 01:01:28 2012

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My Review of Fade Or Shine by Hopium
you might just wanna either keep it free verse or rhyme it as it is a mixture of both. while reading the both get mixed up and it just kind of disturbs the flow. other than it, it is really good. i actually enjoyed reading it. i just hope you get your answers soon
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 00:58:17 2012

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My Review of The Sincerity of Gravity by SonofVampyr
that is a great dedication i must say. but in the second verse you might wanna change the line "And the wax will drip like blood " into something else. it just gets too dark and for me it gets off topic. but other than that, it was amazing!
well done
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seraph1420
Tue Jun 19 03:08:05 2012

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My Review of Just Friends by quierosonreir
now that is something really strong, i must say. i won't agree that all men are same but yes, most of them are. you have really put that together in a pretty good way.
i appreciate it
well done
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seraph1420
Tue Jun 19 02:57:00 2012

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My Review of LONELINESS by manji
that, i must say, really has emotions in it. although, i would have liked it more if it was divided in different verses. but still, i really like it.
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 07:39:27 2012

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My Review of Picture of Past by Thaliasofia16
that was a nice piece, as you said it was your first one so, you did a pretty good job! although i would have preferred it as a free verse. the rhyme makes it a bit "cheesy", if you know what i mean. it kind of takes all the fun away from the piece. all the best!
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 07:33:30 2012

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My Review of Betrayed by Saraigil679
that was really strong and straight and i appreciate that!really touched my heart. you might wanna edit the spelling errors in here. but overall it was a good read
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 07:24:34 2012

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My Review of Death Was Your Touch by Nekana
that is so heartbreaking, yet so heart touching.
you must work on the little grammatical errors in here but overall it was really beautiful. the choice of words was amazing and the way they changed the atmosphere into a darker one is tremendous. loved it so much!
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 06:57:25 2012

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My Review of Simply Elegant by stargazer123123
it just completely took me in while i was reading it. the atmosphere was elegant, quiet, heavenly and what not! you nailed it girl!
though there were some grammatical errors but overall it was amazing.
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 06:50:59 2012

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My Review of YOU SAY -To make lines complete by kitty
that is wonderful! really out of the box thinking i must say! enjoyed it a lot though!
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 05:55:21 2012

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My Review of Let go, walk away.... by lkhwazi2
it makes complete sense. the write ups which come directly from the inside are the best ones indeed. well, that's what i feel!
great job done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 05:52:47 2012

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My Review of Share the load... by lkhwazi2
that is interesting. never ever have i read anything like that! i really enjoyed reading it. though, i feel you could have given more examples in this like you gave of the broken compass one. it would have been more interesting. but still, i enjoyed it
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 05:30:34 2012

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My Review of Dear Heart by lkhwazi2
that is really good. dark, exotic, that's all i can say. the true definition of this little thing known as 'heart', though. on the whole there was one line which stood out for me -
"how can you allow all this to happen and yet your best excuse is fate."
so truly written.
well done
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 17 09:36:39 2012

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My Review of 40th Birthday by garyD43113
lol.........i so enjoyed reading it!
never read such humor. it was great. thanks for sharing!
well done
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 17 09:27:11 2012

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My Review of Virtually by ghostreaper45
that is a perfect 10! i enjoyed it so much!
i don't say it much but you deserve it - worth reading, not once, not twice but a million times! excellent! spotlight
great job
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 17 09:16:22 2012

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My Review of Dear. New Me by poet101
that is so nice. so meaningful and deep. truly feels like it's from the heart.
would have liked to see more of it. please do continue!!!!
great job
cheers!
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