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seraph1420
Wed Apr 8 04:29:00 2015

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My Review of The Play by Anjana
honestly, i didn't expect it to be so good when i started reading it. but, boy, did it blow my mind away! absolutely marvelous.

yes, the world's a stage and we all are it's puppets. it more or less reminded me of Shakespeare's "all the world's a stage". it's just a moral of life we all need to learn to get on and move on from everything material. love it.

cheers.
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seraph1420
Sat Apr 4 11:11:34 2015

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My Review of tears that dont belong by tessa
spoiler! - a poem is never ever, ever, EVER written as a paragraph! no matter how beautiful it is. a poem is in verses. that's the beauty of it. short sentences linked with each other and every one of them has it's importance. every sentence, every word holds it's independent value and, yet, they are nothing without being together. in a paragraph, this elegance is lost. it just doesn't have the same feel of the poem.

now, onto your "poem". i would say, i am not really a big fan of rhymes and that too all the way throughout a piece but it was a good read. i kinda relate to your theme - domestic abuse. it's not much that i've read poems about it so, yes, it was something fresh for me. but i'm a little confused, you say, "I wait for the day you will be gone laid to rest" and then the next line goes, "why do you still let this injustice prolong?"
could you please explain?

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seraph1420
Sat Apr 4 10:51:08 2015

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My Review of Shallow Night by TonyD
that was a hell of a dark poem and i absolutely love it!
we all have our share of dark days and sometimes they get too much on our nerves. it's good to just let out our pleas to the paper with the mighty pen. and darn! it sure helps.
wonderful

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seraph1420
Sat Apr 4 10:45:22 2015

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My Review of The Cage! by Zeeshan
honestly, it's a surprise for me too but i kinda like the overall idea of it.
but i do have a little contradiction. yes, sometimes we do need to lock ourselves up in a cage. not because we should be "protecting" ourselves but just for the sake of rejuvenating again. we all need a little break from this messy world. we all deserve that. no one can actually protect themselves by hiding inside. we would be parish ourselves by doing so. the world needs to move on and to fit in - we need to cope up with the speed. that's the way we would actually be "protecting" ourselves. there is no room for hiding now. we all need that extra bit of courage to face it all and we all SHOULD face it. it makes us stronger. a hell lot of stronger. we learn things. a lot of them. we know when and how to start afresh when needed.
anyhow, overall it was a nice read.

cheers

P.S. i agree with peterelbee - " "If you love some one let them free, if they come back they are yours, if not they never were."
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seraph1420
Thu Oct 16 07:42:58 2014

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My Review of Love Seen by MidKnightRose
Agreed it's messy. It's like as if everything has been put up in a hurry. Try elaborating it. Work with the words with more love. It will be beautiful. And do correct the grammar too

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seraph1420
Sun Jun 16 02:30:21 2013

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My Review of Send Me Some Magic by martinos74
magical
narrating some story in a poem is a pretty challenging task, you succeeded.
well done
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 16 02:27:08 2013

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My Review of "Remaining Echoes" by Valentine
wonderful
this is really something great, I must say. the way in which you represented the darker side is remarkable.
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 11:19:51 2012

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My Review of THE SEARCH by JudyBall
that is really good. the flow, the rhythm everything is great. there are some spelling errors in here and you might just wanna check those. other than that, it's perfect!
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 11:15:11 2012

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My Review of Widdershins by dlpaget
that was amazing. you have told the story in such a great way. rhyming it at the same time, that is art!
great job
well done
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 10:59:13 2012

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My Review of B-school by lalipenz
full of love, emotion and what not! the words say it all. brilliant job. "I fold you...in a letter" you nailed it!
bravo
great job
cheers
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 10:56:00 2012

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My Review of Surrendered kiss by lalipenz
that is absolutely brilliant! how do you do that! that is so great. from the first word till the last your piece makes the writer glued to the screen. i am so speechless and guess what, i read that three times! i still can't get over from its hangover!
you nailed it
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 10:43:11 2012

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My Review of Of Pride by Synchro
i have no words to describe it. it's one of the best free verses i have ever read!
i haven't said it for a long time now but here it goes - worth reading, not once, not twice, but a million times!
you nailed it!
great job
cheers
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 01:12:05 2012

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My Review of Hope Embraced by Caroline
that is absolutely wonderful! i don't know how you do it but you do it pretty well actually really well! you are oh so good. this piece has just no fault in it. it is absolutely perfect!
my favorite line -
"I need a beginning or at least an end"
you nailed it!
great job
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seraph1420
Wed Jun 20 01:01:28 2012

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My Review of Fade Or Shine by Hopium
you might just wanna either keep it free verse or rhyme it as it is a mixture of both. while reading the both get mixed up and it just kind of disturbs the flow. other than it, it is really good. i actually enjoyed reading it. i just hope you get your answers soon
well done
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seraph1420
Tue Jun 19 03:08:05 2012

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My Review of Just Friends by quierosonreir
now that is something really strong, i must say. i won't agree that all men are same but yes, most of them are. you have really put that together in a pretty good way.
i appreciate it
well done
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seraph1420
Tue Jun 19 02:57:00 2012

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My Review of LONELINESS by manji
that, i must say, really has emotions in it. although, i would have liked it more if it was divided in different verses. but still, i really like it.
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 07:39:27 2012

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My Review of Picture of Past by Thaliasofia16
that was a nice piece, as you said it was your first one so, you did a pretty good job! although i would have preferred it as a free verse. the rhyme makes it a bit "cheesy", if you know what i mean. it kind of takes all the fun away from the piece. all the best!
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 07:33:30 2012

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My Review of Betrayed by Saraigil679
that was really strong and straight and i appreciate that!really touched my heart. you might wanna edit the spelling errors in here. but overall it was a good read
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 07:24:34 2012

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My Review of Death Was Your Touch by Nekana
that is so heartbreaking, yet so heart touching.
you must work on the little grammatical errors in here but overall it was really beautiful. the choice of words was amazing and the way they changed the atmosphere into a darker one is tremendous. loved it so much!
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 06:57:25 2012

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My Review of Simply Elegant by stargazer123123
it just completely took me in while i was reading it. the atmosphere was elegant, quiet, heavenly and what not! you nailed it girl!
though there were some grammatical errors but overall it was amazing.
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 06:50:59 2012

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My Review of YOU SAY -To make lines complete by kitty
that is wonderful! really out of the box thinking i must say! enjoyed it a lot though!
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 05:55:21 2012

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My Review of Let go, walk away.... by lkhwazi2
it makes complete sense. the write ups which come directly from the inside are the best ones indeed. well, that's what i feel!
great job done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 05:52:47 2012

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My Review of Share the load... by lkhwazi2
that is interesting. never ever have i read anything like that! i really enjoyed reading it. though, i feel you could have given more examples in this like you gave of the broken compass one. it would have been more interesting. but still, i enjoyed it
well done
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seraph1420
Mon Jun 18 05:30:34 2012

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My Review of Dear Heart by lkhwazi2
that is really good. dark, exotic, that's all i can say. the true definition of this little thing known as 'heart', though. on the whole there was one line which stood out for me -
"how can you allow all this to happen and yet your best excuse is fate."
so truly written.
well done
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seraph1420
Sun Jun 17 09:36:39 2012

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My Review of 40th Birthday by garyD43113
lol.........i so enjoyed reading it!
never read such humor. it was great. thanks for sharing!
well done
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