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sLeonard
Fri Jan 6 09:59:03 2017

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My Review of Happy 13th by SketerMichaels
So lovely! Congratulations on your 13th anniversary, too, what an achievement! This is a stunning ode to that, as well. I look forward to finding someone to dance through the years with, as you have so beautifully written, here.
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sLeonard
Fri Jan 6 09:54:37 2017

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My Review of Words by RachelMurray
Ah, wow! I love this! I always struggle to communicate to people just what writing once meant to me, and this really captures that: it's "woven in my bones" - fantastic.
I only hold back on that final bit of the star because sometimes I lost the rhythm slightly, and I appreciate that poetry isn't always about structure and meter and pace etc. but I get the sense with structured poems like this that that is what's trying to be achieved. Some verses were perfect, to me! Just a really picky point to be annoying, but for instance Stanza 2:

The words were living in your mind
Their thoughts a never ending trail
They found a way into your system
Making your ribcage a poetic jail

The last line feels slightly jilted, a little out of sync. Perhaps if it was: "A poetic ribcage jail". I dunno! That sort of thing!

Still think it's wonderful, though!

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sLeonard
Thu Jun 18 14:41:17 2015

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My Review of LOVE ME IN PINK - ABC ! by FYREBIRD
Hey Bev, this is a difficult one for me to review, since I'm usually the traditional poem in-verse kind of girl, but it's definitely one I will read again to gather new meaning from. It starts me off onto something, just something I can't quite grasp. Quite frustrating lol!

An interesting write that I'll return to, (:

S
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sLeonard
Sat Jun 13 11:25:28 2015

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My Review of They May Say by Caroline
This is worth being late for work for, I just couldn't NOT read it! B, it's deep - like diving into a pool deeper than the ocean and still not touching the ground. That's pretty darn deep! Hehe, basically I'm saying this was spellbinding. The way you pen the questions both confuses me when thinking of an answer whilst still make perfect sense in the poetic world. A-mazing

Best!
S
xo

Oh and PS, spotlight!
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sLeonard
Sat Jun 13 07:48:36 2015

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My Review of Typhlotic Endeavors by DeezyType
Typhlotic? This is new, back to the dictionary for me. A fantastically emotive piece of expression. Quite jarring; sincere. Photos always help to stir up emotional writes.

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sLeonard
Sun Jun 7 16:50:08 2015

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My Review of A Silhouette Now Vanquished by DeezyType
I may be a bit sidetracked by the One Direction I'm (embarrassingly (but still doing anyway)) listening to at the moment, but it doesn't take away from the depth here in this piece. Not gonna lie, I was a bit like woah from "I'll grab your neck" to "...jugular.", but then I've got a butterfly for an avatar so what can I say? In a way, my shivery reaction enunciated the point all the more, that arrogant addiction is a terrible thing leading to horrors unknown to most people; unknown, and unimaginable.

Really I can't comment on something like this, since I'm fortunate enough to have not had any past experiences and I'm not going to pretend to understand what it's like to go through, but you've captured the darkness and desperation that I feel would surround the situation you find yourself in.

Kudos. I hope you manage to get through to your friend, do you show them your poetry? It cuts deep, and might very well help.

"Reach out for my hand," is beautiful, and "Wrong side of heaven," is very well idealised.

Best
Sarah
SL xo

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sLeonard
Sun Jun 7 16:36:00 2015

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My Review of Been Published by ClaraCook
Congratulations! That's a fantastic achievement congratulations again!
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sLeonard
Fri Jun 5 18:30:26 2015

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My Review of The Most Popular Vending Machine by EltonCamp
Fun
and uplifting, probably not the kind of thing I should be reading when trying to get to sleep but hey, I can't resist a good n sweet humour poem. I've got a sweet tooth for poetry that makes me laugh and this was no exception Smiles from ear to ear over here; brilliant idea captured cleverly in so few lines. I feel quite chipper now lol.
S
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sLeonard
Thu Jun 4 16:19:16 2015

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My Review of Mechanized Overdrive by DeezyType
First things first (I'm a realist), I always forget to say just how amazing you are with words. I would never think to string together lines like you do, and they work to a T. Every. Time. Like, dude. :')

I need to consult a dictionary for the word "ascian", though, but I love new words so you'll have taught me something today, which is a plus for me since I've had no work to do since my last exam... Anyway, catching myself before I blabber!

"For I am the selfish one who lives for no others" is a fantastic line, and struck a chord. We all need to take time to ourselves every now and then, just to reboot and reevaluate. No worries, Deezy.

Fantastic fantastic fantastic, great use of repetition and personal pronoun. I won't go all english analysis on you, but this is amazing - great title, too, by the way.

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Sarah

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sLeonard
Thu Jun 4 16:07:36 2015

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My Review of Let's collaborate by DonaZeroZero
Ahh this is brilliant! The last line don't half sum up this poem - humorous and still fantastically penned. I'm smiling from ear to ear right now, and hopefully that's the idea!

S
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sLeonard
Wed Jun 3 16:01:03 2015

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My Review of New River Dream by emerystone
Oh my
this is gorgeous! You pen this in such an interesting way; not something I've ever seen before, which makes this all the more refreshing. It's like each line gave you a different train of thought, all of it just - fascinating!

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sLeonard
Wed Jun 3 15:50:30 2015

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My Review of Fiery Lane by Caroline
B, this is my new favourite on WN. emerystone hit the adverb right on the head: exquisite :') Your story here is enchanting. "Blazing rapture", "fiery lane".. goodness, it might be the Beyonce i'm listening to right now (lol!) but this is something else.

Spotlight a thousand times over.
Your forever friend,
S.
xo

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sLeonard
Wed Jun 3 15:44:22 2015

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My Review of January's Grasp by spokenhues
honest
and so beautifully written, your way with words shines here. Such an emotional write full of sadness, yet a poignancy that pierces through. Fantastic

SL
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sLeonard
Tue Jun 2 19:17:04 2015

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My Review of Exotic Treasure by Caroline
Sometimes B, you leave me utterly speechless...

SL
xo

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sLeonard
Tue Jun 2 09:32:11 2015

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My Review of Fear of Commitment by DeezyType
Deezy, this is great. I only hold back on the final 0.5 of a star cos I struggled a bit with finding a rhythm - and that's nkt to say that the piece was any less striking without one, I just enjoy reading poetry that I can bob to, if you get what I mean! To be fair, I actually quite like how you've structured it, with the commas punctuating certain phrases so that they have more significance. It's different to the flowery norm of lots of poetry. I must just like a particular comfort zone that I didn't know I had before. Awks

I loved the two lines ending in "mentality" and "reality", really shows off your skill for clever rhyme. In fact, the whole piece is clever - I want to be able to answer your questions for you, and the repetition really emphasises a feeling of longing and desperation for tj girl you truly want to be with. Very well written, as patronising as that sounds lol!

Crackin
SL

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sLeonard
Mon Jun 1 15:26:13 2015

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My Review of Nastalgia by DeezyType
Jeezlouise
and all things incredible, this is amazing! Not gonna lie I don't know why you haven't had 5 stars from both other reviewers here, but hey, each to their own, I suppose (naa, they missed the 5.0 button, that's all!)

I loved this - wait, maybe 'loved' isn't the right way to put it. Reading this piece, I felt like I understood what you were trying to say whilst at the same time still being told a story that, as much as I can't entirely relate to, can empathise with as well as I'm able. You had some really fantastic lines, as well: "The truth is that I care too much about the past, I am glass // Transparent through everything spoken, my mind has not yet awoken", stuck-out for me the most.

Not sure if you mean "One faint motion" rather than "one feint motion", although thinking about it now, 'feint' gives the idea of you thinking about X all the time a different meaning. Each to his own, I suppose :')

Spotlight, I honestly think this is super good.
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sLeonard
Fri May 29 07:48:12 2015

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My Review of Shattered Glass Reflects the Same by DeezyType
Inspiring
And at the same time, quite chilling. I know you've ticked the box for Critical Reviews, but I haven't written enough myself lately to be giving others' improvements, and I'm awful at reading lyrics as music without knowing the music behind them already, so basically I'm saying this is an awful review, okay? Bare with me! 😂

On the basis that all music is poetry, this is really.. Stunning, I think, is what I'm looking for; in that I sat back to take it in and really tried to read the words on more than face value. Did you mean to go an extra text size halfway through? From talking about 'her' to talking about 'I'? I liked that also the repetition of the "And so she/I screamed.." (I guess that's the chorus, right? See, I'm bloody terrible!) was very effective, your skill with words shining through. And of course the odd use of rhyming throughout, I can definitely appreciate that!

All in all, a fantastic first post. I look forward to reading more from you, and I'll try my best to actually be critical in the future - promise :')
xo

SL.

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sLeonard
Tue May 26 16:14:52 2015

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My Review of "Beauty & The Beast" by kitty
Fun and thought-provoking at the same time, with a great humour twist at the end, too I've just been looking at Disney tattoos, so at first I was really drawn in by your title and I'm so glad I was because this piece was well worth the read. It read well and had great meaning. I loved it!

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sLeonard
Tue May 26 13:31:15 2015

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My Review of Cherish by Caroline
Such a heartfelt and at the same time heart-wrenching poem. You've written of love lost so beautifully here, thank goodness it's fantasy. The images are the perfect piece de resistance, giving a real fantastical mystery to the piece as a whole.

Ever always, my friend, SL!
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sLeonard
Sat May 23 09:48:03 2015

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My Review of Starlit Ocean by Caroline
B this is hawt! And still classy at the same time. There's a sense of dignity in this write, when talking about fevered breath and whatnot it's easy to lose the 'woman's touch', but you've natched desire and dignified penning perfectly! I love the changes of pace in the final two verses, also. Great stuff

SL, naturally. S.

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sLeonard
Thu May 21 18:54:08 2015

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My Review of Insignia's Kiss by Caroline
Ohh B I haven't even read the poem yet but already by just the title I can tell it's going to sail me away. I don't know if you can see it yet, but the moon's gorgeous tonight!
"Drenched in Chardonnay", what a fantastic vision! There's a natural pace to this write that just carried me along, and I drank it in. I know you've said critical reviews preferred, but I don't think there's anything that you could change to improve the Kiss. Technically, meh, I'm sure someone can always pick at something, but poetry is heart and this says it all. 💋

Positively golden, SL!
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sLeonard
Thu May 21 02:32:47 2015

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My Review of What? by Caroline
So thought-provoking! Philosophy studies has been my latest obsession for a few months now (random, I know lol) and you've really captured the feeling of 'questioning' that surrounds the subject... Well, for me at least, cos I'm never usually happy with the simple answers!
It's like a soft touch, this piece, and the line: Does a stream run backwards to meet the river, really struck a chord with me. Great imagery and idea in the first verse, too!

Gorgeous gorgrous gorgeous! Spotlight, my B. Of course.
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sLeonard
Wed May 20 17:33:08 2015

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My Review of Silent Beauty by Caroline
Oh how beautiful is this! Peonies are my favourite flower so from the very first line you already had me hooked on this being a gorgeously worded write. I've always admired the apparent ease with which you put words together, and here is no exception - it's truly stunning. I've missed reading beautiful things like this,

Naturally, spotlight.
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sLeonard
Wed May 20 15:27:15 2015

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My Review of The Constipated Rhino by simon81
My days this is great Naturally, the title drew me in! But after the first verse the poem became so much more than rhinos and constipation lol! The third verse was wordy and struck a chord; very well written and perfectly confuzzling :')
A fun read that turned out to be very different that what I was expecting. Thank you!
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sLeonard
Tue Oct 28 09:37:05 2014

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My Review of Hurricane by DeviantWriter88
Metaphor's for miles
and understandably so. I love - in that morbid fascination kind of way - the references to depth: six feet under, sinking deeper down, etc. was very visual. Reading through once gave me an initial thought as to the hurricane, but then a second read sent me off on a completely different gust of wind. Really vivid and emotive, a sad yet sentimental seeming piece. Great structure and form (: xo
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