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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 18:11:09 2016

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My Review of Do You Know About Which Dresses To Wear In 2016? by JohnAlica

I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text.
I would be very happy to proofread all your content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, II'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 18:10:30 2016

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My Review of What Is The Trending Fashion For Women In 2016? by JohnAlica

I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text.
I would be very happy to proofread all your content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, I'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 06:41:04 2016

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My Review of How can students make their final thesis or disser by smithjohn
I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text.
I would be very happy to proofread all your content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, I'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 06:34:13 2016

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My Review of Good Vocabulary Builds Great Essays by smithjohn
I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text,
both here and on your website.
Therefore, I would be very happy to proofread content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, I'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Wed Mar 23 18:28:09 2016

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My Review of THE HILLS OF MARCH by MaryHazelUpton
What a lovely story, Mary.
I wish someone had kept all my old notebooks.
Thanks for sharing.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Sun Mar 20 08:24:53 2016

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My Review of A Momentary Lapse by bickerstaffe
Tragic events indelibly etched at a young age always hit home the hardest and stay with us longest, don't they.
I have to confess the prosey style you favor isn't my personal favorite, but it certainly works well here and in any case what matters most is, I did enjoy the read.
Thankyou.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Sun Mar 20 08:12:39 2016

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My Review of Faded Destiny by thecoolcomic
Ah, the power of perhaps.
Nothing sadder than unrequited love, wishing you'd kicked the ball harder and memories flooding back.
But past is past and perhaps one day we have to let it go for good.
Best ~ Abra



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Abracadabra
Wed Mar 16 04:21:25 2016

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My Review of Elegy Of A Drunk by jmike
Some interesting ideas about boozing in this write.
I especially liked the concept of the glassware community and the alcohol angel.
At times it reads as prose rather than a poem though, bearing in mind that with poetry
less is always more.

For instance " Chyking girls in my puke stained shirt" says it better than " I would chyke some girls with my shirt stained with puke."

"The soft winds was like the waves of the sea." needs a second look, btw.

The best writers will tell you that they edit their work until they drop!

All the above, just MHO of course.

Thanks for an enjoyable read.
Best ~ Abra


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Abracadabra
Wed Mar 16 04:01:20 2016

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My Review of MY LOVE MELANCHOLIA EUPHORIA by AlexHannah
Made me grin.
A space after each four line verse would improve the flow and help your reader.
I'm OK with the shock tactic in the final part of MLM, but unsure about that last verse having sufficient impact. It needs a bigger bang to finish.

Something like this maybe...

"Sadly there is no- one else
Who makes my passions soar
I'm just an occasional squeezed in fuck
He visits when he's bored"

And I'd like a stronger alternative to 'squeezed in' but hey it's your poem.

All the above just MHO. Keep writing.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 14 04:49:16 2016

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My Review of Abiding Love, til the end. Break up VIIII by shilo2231
Yes, writing is the best therapy there is -- and of course it's free.
I know you're new to this, but you've asked for some honesty -- so here's my two cents.
A letter style rant to your love which goes on far too long to hold your reader's attention doesn't equal poetry.
Perhaps the 'trick' with poems on a subject like this is to find different or new ways of saying the same old thing -- because we've all been there -- in a relationship that didn't work out to our liking. Anything else will sound cliche.
Editing and presentation are always as important as what you have to say.
No poem is ever finished only abandoned one day by its creator.
So edit, edit and edit again until you get right down to the bone.
Read the 'best' poetry you can find and then go back and take a look at your own.
Here you need to lose any cotton wool lines and get rid of that double spacing for starters.
I know you are extremely brave to post your personal thoughts for scrutiny on the internet and I give you full marks for your courage and honesty -- so if anything here^^^
offends -- just disregard it.
Please keep writing.

Best ~ Abra


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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 14 04:07:48 2016

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My Review of Pendulum by JohnCreekmore
Evocative urge to go with the flow.
As I often say to myself, John : "What's the worst thing that can happen...?"
One thing's for sure, all our clocks are ticking and one day they'll all run down.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 14 04:01:50 2016

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My Review of Lost by Birsman
Used to have drawfuls of similarly themed lyrics myself -- although I'm not sure where they are now...
This one does it's job - which may have been intensely cathartic for the writer at the time of writing and could be a reason it got stashed away somewhere.
Do the lyrics inspire me to create my own instant head melody and start humming it over breakfast, popping up again throughout the day with its catchy hook -- if I'm honest probably not.
But it's heartfelt, honest and well constructed and that's what counts.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Sat Jan 2 03:34:33 2016

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My Review of Marla by Viaclovsky
Enjoyed this very sensual write with obvious classical influences.
This is personal and heartfelt which means it's hard to be critical of pure emotion.
The puzzle for me and my only caveat is your punctuation.
Do you really need it with line breaks like those?
But then I guess it's each to his own poison.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 2 03:37:28 2015

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My Review of BLACK AS COAL by carolann
I am allergic to CAPS and not a fan of simple rhyme either so I'm a tad unsure how I got to the end of this - which must be testimony indeed to you the writer!
It made me smile on a Monday morning!
So a big thank you for sharing this bit of fun.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Mon Nov 3 05:31:16 2014

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My Review of Dyman Associates Risk Management by howittpatrick
So sorry I have no time to translate this for you today.
But I do wonder who you are hoping to reach with this.
Purely from a business perspective how does a writer's website in English assist you with your endeavors?
I'm afraid you have me stumped. I'm darned if I know the answer to that one.

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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 1 06:26:06 2014

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My Review of on a roll by hungrytiger
This works a treat as a train of thought that derails itself and leaves you hanging in the middle of nowhere on a broken bridge.
The trick with Katie is that she gets paid and you don't.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 1 06:14:44 2014

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My Review of Newport International Group - Travel tips by bealharlin00
You can thank Google for this translation of your spam

Why go?
Can a city where grown men walking the streets dressed in lederhosen ever be considered cool? Spending a few days in Munich Glockenbachviertel district, just south of the old town, and you might concede that it can. This area is the hub of the city's alternative scene since the 1980s, when it was colonized by the Munich gays and lesbians society. If you are looking for an antidote to beery, blokey commercialism Kaanapali the Oktoberfest, this is the place to go.
What to do
enjoy coffee and cinnamon buns in one of the cafes overlooking the green Gärtner Platz, cultural and geographical heart of the area - cotidiano's current haunt of choice (cotidiano.de). Go shopping in arty shops on Hans-Sachs -Strasse. Cycle along the banks of the River Isar to the English Garden, a park that is home to one of Munich's most famous beer gardens, Chinesischer Turm, where you can buy a pint Hofbräu and some steckerlfisch.
Where to stay
the recent opening of the flushing meadows Hotel & Bar has created a loopy new focal point of tourists and locals. Choose between a studio loft or penthouse suite complex industrial-meets-Scandi style.
Where to eat
for lunch on the run or late snack, a gourmet hot dog from Fine Spitz is hard to beat (Müller Strasse 17). For something more adventurous try Fei Scho, a Vietnamese-Bavarian fusion cafe (Kolosseumstrasse 6).
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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 1 06:10:38 2014

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My Review of His Existence by Archia
When the only treasure in this world is between a person's ears it always puzzles me why people search for answers outside.
Admire your faith and thank you for sharing ~ Abra.
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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 1 05:59:14 2014

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My Review of The Small Things by zekezat
The idea of being swallowed by the mouths of empty days is a line worthy of Buk....
It's almost a poem within itself.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Fri Oct 31 07:34:35 2014

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My Review of To Idiots Who Spread Disease by EltonCamp
In France shaking hands at every opportunity used to be the norm.
I knew of someone who worked in a very formal office environment in Paris where the boss insisted on a full handshake from all his staff when starting and finishing work - including when they left for the lunch break!
Not surprisingly everyone always seemed to have a cold.
I'm told the American high five is much less likely to transmit germs, though - but you can't be too careful.
Another interesting write from you, Elton.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Wed Oct 29 06:06:08 2014

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My Review of The Koyal Group Info Mag -Forskere Gør Kvantesprin by kettinneali
Not many of us here speak Danish - try this....

The Koyal Group Info Mag sors Do Kvantesprin

In another breakthrough in the weird, wonky world of quantum physics, scientists teleport data an unprecedented distance using a new technique - parched us closer to the emergence of a "quantum internet."
We are one step closer to creating the Ansible communicator in "End Game" warp drive imagines Mexican physicist Miguel Alcubierre and a "Star Trek" -style transporter.
Or we can at least keep thinking that while scientists do the hard, incremental physics required to keep us dream about the kind of future progress. This time the progress comes from a research out of the laboratory of Professor Nicolas Gisin of the physics department at the University of Geneva.
The team achieved teleportation of quantum state of a photon - in this case, it is known as the photon's polarization - a crystal-encased photon more than 25 kilometers (15.5 miles) away. The distance breaks the previous record of 6 km (3.7 miles) set 10 years ago by the same team using the method. This marks the latest success in a series of experiments in the group, led by physicist Félix Bussieres, has implemented over the last decade in an attempt to better understand quantum data transfer with ever newer technology.
The results obtained in March was published in the journal Nature Photonics on 21 September.
In this particular experiment, the researchers saved a photon in a crystal, mainly to create a solid-state memory. They sent another photon of a different wavelength 25km away through the optical fiber, after which they had to a third photon. Since the first two photons were entangled - a quantum property means the particles could talk to each other across an infinite distance - the interaction sent data to the image stored in the memory bank where the team was able to get to it.
Still with me?
The team uses pool balls to help explain what they are doing.
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Abracadabra
Tue Oct 28 05:35:04 2014

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My Review of Critique What I Wrote by EltonCamp
Spot on Elton.
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Abracadabra
Tue Oct 28 05:20:06 2014

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My Review of Ezra Mar by AmandaOlsonLoves
Real gut wrenching honesty that leaves a tear in the eye.
Fine writing from the heart like this takes true courage and I know you'll feel lighter for it.
Please do not devalue your ability (as per your Author Note) - this is most certainly spotlight material.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Tue Oct 28 05:07:15 2014

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My Review of Elliott and Associates - Tips for den verdensbero by angelcain

Here are six tips to avoid becoming an emergency:

1. Tell how much you want to be in 24 months and use the revenue goals to develop your game plan. Why 24 months? Because if you are going to survive for two years while others die, you need to keep your eyes on the code and the current results of your efforts. It makes no sense to waste your time on a five-year plan, for example, since the latter years may not matter if your short-term efforts fail.

2. Choose who you want to serve. How will you generate your revenue? Select customers who have the potential to deliver growth you want and be specific in your selection. Look for discrete groups of people who you feel would value you provide. I always direct people to go for 'quick and easy' customers since survival depends on how fast you ramp up sales. You can not afford a six month selling cycle in a 24-month game plan.

3. Determine how you plan to compete and win by answering the killer question: "Why should I buy from you and not your competitor?" This is where most companies choke. You must be clear on how you are different from your competition. If you can not answer the question, you will be judged as essentially the same as any other and will be invisible to your customers you are aiming. The only note is the requirement that will differentiate your business from cattle: "We are the only one who ..."

4. Focus on the critical few, not the many possible. You do not have unlimited bandwidth and resources to do all this. Choose three things that you think will help you execute your game plan ahead and do them quickly. Many entrepreneurs fail because they are completely captivated by the possibilities and try to achieve too much. Keep your to-do list short and get things done.

5. Cut the crap. The game is as much about stopping things as it is about starting things. You can not afford to carry on activities not directly related to executing the game plan. Take an inventory of all the tasks you have on the go. Create a cut list of all the things you are doing to be stopped, and a hold list of things you should keep doing that strong game plan contributors.

6. Plan Run. Their words with the game plan - it is not carved in stone. Be open to adjusting it based on what you discover and learn through code. No plan ever turn out the way you intended; there are too many unpredictable variables in play. Plan, do, learn, adjust, perform, learn, adjust planning model that works in a volatile world.

WHY post this on a writer's website?????
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Abracadabra
Sat Oct 25 06:38:57 2014

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My Review of Dipawali by shar1968
This type of celebration can be a great leveller and enable people to forget their own troubles, for a while at least.
I rather wish the noise from the fireworks would stop at midnight though, as sometimes you can have too much of a good thing.
Best ~ Abra
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