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Abracadabra
Sat Dec 3 02:07:13 2016

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My Review of came in for... by feather
Evocative whimsical wishfulness about something naughty in the snow perhaps?
Made me smile.
Best ~ Abra.
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Abracadabra
Sat Dec 3 01:56:49 2016

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My Review of A Little Child by sicky666x
Yeah, let's hear it for human sacrifice and why don't we all grow tentacles.
Mass insanity here we come. You never know it may even be an improvement on the way we do things now.
Thanks for the read.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Tue Nov 29 01:52:46 2016

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My Review of Away by TheScarecrow
A charming little love poem.
I especially liked --- "without you, I am silent words"
Keep writing. Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Sun Nov 27 06:11:10 2016

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My Review of DO OR DIE. by kashaw
Had to Google this because I'd never heard of spirulina.
Intriguing that it's widely described as the most nutrient dense food on the planet.
Will be checking it out at the drugstore though as I'm not as brave as you.
I've always hated anything slimy in my mouth but pills I can handle.
Thanks for the read.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 26 20:55:01 2016

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My Review of Forget Me Not by lostsouls123
I'm sure that the fates will provide someone better for the writer, however certain she may feel right now that her heart will always belong to the person who just slipped through her fingers.
There's seven billion people on the planet which equates to plenty to choose from.
Oh, you wanted crit didn't you... "echoes in the wind" "light fleeting from eyes" are too cliche --when you're feeling your words, try & come up with something unique to you -- otherwise it sounds like it's all been said before (which it mostly has,btw)
I know it's free verse but if you tailor your line lengths a tad it'll generate a better flow. Read this aloud & you'll get what I mean. << that' s just MHO of course.
You write with refreshing honesty.

Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Wed Nov 2 18:15:07 2016

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My Review of Akashic Records by sicky666x
Most unusual and a tad scary but in a good way.
I'm guessing you've written a lot of these and I'm certain you could turn them all into a book if you wanted to.
Keep going and tx for the read.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Wed Oct 26 06:17:15 2016

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My Review of Wrinkled and Weary by matelotrod
Learn to age gracefully, they say -- although personally I can only resent the gradual decline and decay that afflicts us all sooner or later.
I've always thought it would be better to continue life in perfect condition until a certain age when it automatically becomes time to leave.
The shock discovery of a photo of myself in younger days was something I actually experienced recently. I was barely recognisable, so can relate totally to your poem.
Needless to say I consigned said photo to the shredder immediately.
Best ~ Abra


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Abracadabra
Tue Oct 25 10:34:25 2016

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My Review of 480. by Profanisaurus
Wise words indeed.
I'm loathe to nickpick but I do wish you'd lose the double spacing though.
Sorry to be a bore, but to me presentation can seem as important as content.
Well penned nonetheless.
Best -- A.

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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 18:11:09 2016

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My Review of Do You Know About Which Dresses To Wear In 2016? by JohnAlica

I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text.
I would be very happy to proofread all your content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, II'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 18:10:30 2016

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My Review of What Is The Trending Fashion For Women In 2016? by JohnAlica

I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text.
I would be very happy to proofread all your content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, I'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 06:41:04 2016

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My Review of How can students make their final thesis or disser by smithjohn
I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text.
I would be very happy to proofread all your content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, I'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Thu Mar 24 06:34:13 2016

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My Review of Good Vocabulary Builds Great Essays by smithjohn
I regret to inform you that I have identified a number of glaring errors in your text,
both here and on your website.
Therefore, I would be very happy to proofread content for you if required.
I have many years of experience as an editor and writer and although I'm not cheap, because your business entirely depends on complete accuracy, I'm sure you'll agree it would be money wisely spent.
Please feel free to contact me at WN.
Best regards ~Abra
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Abracadabra
Wed Mar 23 18:28:09 2016

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My Review of THE HILLS OF MARCH by MaryHazelUpton
What a lovely story, Mary.
I wish someone had kept all my old notebooks.
Thanks for sharing.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Sun Mar 20 08:24:53 2016

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My Review of A Momentary Lapse by bickerstaffe
Tragic events indelibly etched at a young age always hit home the hardest and stay with us longest, don't they.
I have to confess the prosey style you favor isn't my personal favorite, but it certainly works well here and in any case what matters most is, I did enjoy the read.
Thankyou.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Sun Mar 20 08:12:39 2016

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My Review of Faded Destiny by thecoolcomic
Ah, the power of perhaps.
Nothing sadder than unrequited love, wishing you'd kicked the ball harder and memories flooding back.
But past is past and perhaps one day we have to let it go for good.
Best ~ Abra



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Abracadabra
Wed Mar 16 04:21:25 2016

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My Review of Elegy Of A Drunk by jmike
Some interesting ideas about boozing in this write.
I especially liked the concept of the glassware community and the alcohol angel.
At times it reads as prose rather than a poem though, bearing in mind that with poetry
less is always more.

For instance " Chyking girls in my puke stained shirt" says it better than " I would chyke some girls with my shirt stained with puke."

"The soft winds was like the waves of the sea." needs a second look, btw.

The best writers will tell you that they edit their work until they drop!

All the above, just MHO of course.

Thanks for an enjoyable read.
Best ~ Abra


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Abracadabra
Wed Mar 16 04:01:20 2016

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My Review of MY LOVE MELANCHOLIA EUPHORIA by AlexHannah
Made me grin.
A space after each four line verse would improve the flow and help your reader.
I'm OK with the shock tactic in the final part of MLM, but unsure about that last verse having sufficient impact. It needs a bigger bang to finish.

Something like this maybe...

"Sadly there is no- one else
Who makes my passions soar
I'm just an occasional squeezed in fuck
He visits when he's bored"

And I'd like a stronger alternative to 'squeezed in' but hey it's your poem.

All the above just MHO. Keep writing.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 14 04:49:16 2016

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My Review of Abiding Love, til the end. Break up VIIII by shilo2231
Yes, writing is the best therapy there is -- and of course it's free.
I know you're new to this, but you've asked for some honesty -- so here's my two cents.
A letter style rant to your love which goes on far too long to hold your reader's attention doesn't equal poetry.
Perhaps the 'trick' with poems on a subject like this is to find different or new ways of saying the same old thing -- because we've all been there -- in a relationship that didn't work out to our liking. Anything else will sound cliche.
Editing and presentation are always as important as what you have to say.
No poem is ever finished only abandoned one day by its creator.
So edit, edit and edit again until you get right down to the bone.
Read the 'best' poetry you can find and then go back and take a look at your own.
Here you need to lose any cotton wool lines and get rid of that double spacing for starters.
I know you are extremely brave to post your personal thoughts for scrutiny on the internet and I give you full marks for your courage and honesty -- so if anything here^^^
offends -- just disregard it.
Please keep writing.

Best ~ Abra


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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 14 04:07:48 2016

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My Review of Pendulum by JohnCreekmore
Evocative urge to go with the flow.
As I often say to myself, John : "What's the worst thing that can happen...?"
One thing's for sure, all our clocks are ticking and one day they'll all run down.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 14 04:01:50 2016

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My Review of Lost by Birsman
Used to have drawfuls of similarly themed lyrics myself -- although I'm not sure where they are now...
This one does it's job - which may have been intensely cathartic for the writer at the time of writing and could be a reason it got stashed away somewhere.
Do the lyrics inspire me to create my own instant head melody and start humming it over breakfast, popping up again throughout the day with its catchy hook -- if I'm honest probably not.
But it's heartfelt, honest and well constructed and that's what counts.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Sat Jan 2 03:34:33 2016

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My Review of Marla by Viaclovsky
Enjoyed this very sensual write with obvious classical influences.
This is personal and heartfelt which means it's hard to be critical of pure emotion.
The puzzle for me and my only caveat is your punctuation.
Do you really need it with line breaks like those?
But then I guess it's each to his own poison.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Mon Mar 2 03:37:28 2015

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My Review of BLACK AS COAL by carolann
I am allergic to CAPS and not a fan of simple rhyme either so I'm a tad unsure how I got to the end of this - which must be testimony indeed to you the writer!
It made me smile on a Monday morning!
So a big thank you for sharing this bit of fun.
Best ~ Abra
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Abracadabra
Mon Nov 3 05:31:16 2014

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My Review of Dyman Associates Risk Management by howittpatrick
So sorry I have no time to translate this for you today.
But I do wonder who you are hoping to reach with this.
Purely from a business perspective how does a writer's website in English assist you with your endeavors?
I'm afraid you have me stumped. I'm darned if I know the answer to that one.

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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 1 06:26:06 2014

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My Review of on a roll by hungrytiger
This works a treat as a train of thought that derails itself and leaves you hanging in the middle of nowhere on a broken bridge.
The trick with Katie is that she gets paid and you don't.
Best ~ Abra

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Abracadabra
Sat Nov 1 06:14:44 2014

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My Review of Newport International Group - Travel tips by bealharlin00
You can thank Google for this translation of your spam

Why go?
Can a city where grown men walking the streets dressed in lederhosen ever be considered cool? Spending a few days in Munich Glockenbachviertel district, just south of the old town, and you might concede that it can. This area is the hub of the city's alternative scene since the 1980s, when it was colonized by the Munich gays and lesbians society. If you are looking for an antidote to beery, blokey commercialism Kaanapali the Oktoberfest, this is the place to go.
What to do
enjoy coffee and cinnamon buns in one of the cafes overlooking the green Gärtner Platz, cultural and geographical heart of the area - cotidiano's current haunt of choice (cotidiano.de). Go shopping in arty shops on Hans-Sachs -Strasse. Cycle along the banks of the River Isar to the English Garden, a park that is home to one of Munich's most famous beer gardens, Chinesischer Turm, where you can buy a pint Hofbräu and some steckerlfisch.
Where to stay
the recent opening of the flushing meadows Hotel & Bar has created a loopy new focal point of tourists and locals. Choose between a studio loft or penthouse suite complex industrial-meets-Scandi style.
Where to eat
for lunch on the run or late snack, a gourmet hot dog from Fine Spitz is hard to beat (Müller Strasse 17). For something more adventurous try Fei Scho, a Vietnamese-Bavarian fusion cafe (Kolosseumstrasse 6).
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